all my efforts went to pleasing you,
being good and silent...for you
my reward is a tight frown
or dissapointed sighs
now I discover
this was never
for you, but
rather
me
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This could be interpreted in a few different ways...I like the sense, as the poem went on, that realizations were occuring in you and you were beginning to focus on yourself and your happiness and not pleasing another.
Am I even close?
I'm sorry if I'm not...but either way, this is a really cool form, I haven't seen it before and it seems like it could be challenging.
Take care...I hope I can read more soon but I better get to homework and quit being a slacker!
♥
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Wow! I love how you angled the poem. The words flowed magically. Well written. Blessed Be! ~~Shannon~~
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You have penned a very heartfelt poem. I love the form you used. I never tried this one before. Thank you for sharing. Take care, Sandy
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that is an interesting way to look at something, i mean really. but you know it makes for a good poem, keep it flowing
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This is a perfect Nonet Tay! The syllable count is right on. The image is vivid and emotional. You got the idea too. The pleasing efforts are for you. Eventially you'll get your reward from others, hang in there, I'm proud of you.
Love,
Amera♥ your AP mom.
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thank you Amera. Your comments mean so much to me.
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Interesting. I like that receding lines. It's a good form. It's short but it can really hit the reader. Keep writing my friend.
~Whitemaiden
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