Legs wrapped
arms frozen in place.
i'm here..
i'm here..
she cries.
showerhead beating
clean skin.
so
wet.
so
dirty.
can't think.
can't move.
just a child
in the rain...
just a child.
a mere..
child.
let the water drain.
it's running cold.
another day.
Author notes
Sorry, didn't exactly keep it to ten lines, but I got carried away and couldn't stop. It's not lengthy though. Hope you like it.
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Comments
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Thank you for the entry. :f
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I like the interesting twist of this.
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i loved the way this read. i wanted to say the words out loud. i suppose i wanted to know her specific story, but then the magic might have been ruined. and honestly, i could completely empathize with it this way, which i love.
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this is very moving.
i enjoyed reading this.
you have a unique style.
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