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No Escape

What is a memory

but a lingering photographic echo?

If not a simple recollection,

then what?

 

Yet,

these renmants of old

are not easily erased.

Sent up in flames,

curled up in smoke,

but still there.

 

Sent to drown

in the darkest ocean.

Drenched in water,

doused in salt,

unreadable,

and still lasting

all the same

 

Buried below

the deepest soils.

Darkened with age,

soiled from dirt,

ground-water soaked.

But somehow,

it always resurfaces again.

 

So many way

of being destroyed.

However, somehow,

they always come back

to ensnare you once more.

Always come back again.

So burn them,

bury them,

and drown them;

memories last forever.

There is no forgetting;

there is no escape.

Author notes

Note About the Picture- No, I don't condone book burning in any way, shape, or form, but the picture fit with the poem. I'm sure you realized that. ^.^ Hope you enjoyed it.

1. Name [Real & User]-
a. Real- Amanda
b. User- Night-Owl

2. Age
a. 13 (Hopefully that won't count me out...)

3. Amount of Poetic Experience
a. A few years. (I've been writing since K5 but I've only recently been working on poetry. The last two years or so really.)

4. Typical/Strongest Style
a. Free Verse
b. Rhyme

5. Unusual/Weakest Style
a. Forms (I.E. Sonnets, etc.)
b. Syllable Counts

6. Favorite Type of Inspiration
a. Pictures

7. Amount of Multiround Experience
a. One other besides this one

8. Some Accomplishments
a. Won a writing contest in my English Class
b. Published in a book (Granted that was 5th grade...)
c. Won some trophies on here

9. One Fact I Don’t Know About You
a. I am first chair clarinet. (& I worked my butt off to get there too! So, I'm keeping it for a very LONG time!!

10. Additional Comments You’d Like Me To Read
a. On April 1st I am going out of town for spring break. I do not know if that will have any effect on this particular contest. However, if it will then I would like to know.

A contest entry

Comment honestly please. But don't be rude. CONSTRUCTIVE CRISTISM is welcome. But don't bash me; I work hard.

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Comments

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  • blackday
    March 22, 2008

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    The poem was a good concept. It really was. I liked what you had to say. The way you did it though, is where you lost me.

    Your word choice in the final stanza. You used the word "haunt" a few times. & that type of thing repeats in your poem. You could vary up your word choice to show that you have a vocabulary outside of those simple words.

    Also, "haunting memories" is a cliche. That phrase as been used many, many times. Try for something more original. :]

    You can enter again or revise. Whatever you'd like to do.


    • Simply Simple
      March 22, 2008
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      Editing finished. Not a whole lot was changed, but the things you pointed out were edited. Thank you for the advice.

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    February 29, 2008

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    I think this is a great piece here I wruite when I am everything from happy to pissed off thank you for taking the time to enter this contest best wishes and much luck


  • Dak
    January 28, 2008

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    "So burn them,
    bury them,
    and drown them;
    memories haunt forever.
    There is no forgetting;
    there is no escape."

    Hehe, I loved those ends lines. You write good when you're bored .




    • Simply Simple
      January 28, 2008
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      Thank you.
      I suppose so. It just depends on the level of boredem.
      I've found I think best when I am bored beyond all belief. Hehe.


  • Field Marhal Benjy
    January 28, 2008

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    Every little thing that we say or do will never leave us alone. Everything, even the good things, willl only end up haunting us in the end. This poem is a good example of that.


  • sesshomaru777
    January 28, 2008

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    I like this poem, i suppose there are a great many things that each one of us whould like to forget.sometimes you suceed in doing it, but it's hard.
    Note: sometimes it's just better to forget the pain instead of being tortured by it.


  • fantasysmurf
    January 27, 2008

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    Remember to remember

    Hi there Fogwolf. I like this poem. The ONLY constructive criticism I have is: not all memories should be forgotten. How else would we learn from our mistakes and grow?
    Your poem is great, it describes our 'photographic memory' in a different perspective.


    • Simply Simple
      January 27, 2008
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      Thank you. I agree about the fact not all memories should be forgotten. This was more a poem to the people that want to forget everything. I was just trying to tell them that it's not going to happen. Thank you for the comment. ^.^

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