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(The Love Note) Signed Alice Cullen.

Searching to the future,
Wondering what I'll see.
Praying that no human's
Fall victim to thee.
For you are my love,
And while I'll go where ever you do,
And nothing can make me not love you.
Jasper Hale, I worry for you.
I worry that we're testing your limits,
I worry that it's going to be too much.
I worry that you can't handle it,
But I know we'll get through,
Cause Jasper Hale, I love you.

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OPTION 2) Write a poem from a character's point of view. Please put the character's name in your author's notes, and if they are talking specifically to another person, please put that in your author's notes too.
Alice to Jasper<3

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  • oceanlove
    July 12
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    Wow.

    Jasper is very lucky to have Alice if this is how she feels about him. Good job.


  • Missa
    November 21, 2008
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    awww! so cute! alice is my fav character! [[besides edward]]


  • Valley Girl silver member
    March 4, 2008
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    Again this is a great write, Although it doesn't really match the prompt.. (Edward and Jasper fighting over Bella). But thank you for entering, and good luck.

  • Valley Girl silver member
    February 17, 2008

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    This is a very sweet write, I think that it sounds like Alice to a perfect tee. you can tell when she speaks, how much she loves Jasper and how she is always worrying about him. Great write. Thanks for sharing.


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 15, 2008

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    Very sweet. I know how you feel, you know how much you can handle but you don't know how much he can. Steven said something similar to me, when he said, 'I am glad nobody else loves me or loves you, as we don't want anyone competing for us'.


  • JessTheMess
    February 7, 2008

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    aww =] i heart this =]
    my only note would be punctuation, its kind of a run on... i found myself wanting to read it more like an actual note, vs a poem note...
    and in line...*counts*...9... "i worry that were testing your limits"
    i believe an apostrophe's missing =]


  • Simply Simple
    January 31, 2008

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    Awwwww!!! I love it! I love it! I LOOOOOVE it! It's just so perfect. It really sounds like Alice wrote it too. Great write!


    • LoneFairrie
      February 3, 2008
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      Thank you very much!!! I had wanted to do something like this for a while before I acctully set pen to paper.


  • Zane Rose
    January 28, 2008

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    I love this! It really does have a lot of feeling in it and I really love how you fit Jasper's name in the poem. That was cool. Good luck in the contest!
    ~VampireTears~


  • Anguas-Confusion gold member
    January 27, 2008

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    wow, a very good write.... a lot of feeling there... well done. great take on the prompt. the very best of luck to you in this contest. xxxxxxx

    • LoneFairrie
      January 28, 2008
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      Thank you very much. It is my favorite couple from the book series and I had wanted to do this peice for a while. I just wasn't sure how I was going to do it... until I saw the contest =]


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    January 27, 2008

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    this is such a beautiful job and powerful piece penned from the prompt. i absolutly love this well done and best of luck


  • lemonhead
    January 27, 2008
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    WOW wonderful job! I love it! Every thing about it is great!


    • LoneFairrie
      January 27, 2008
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      Thank you. I'm sure you already know what I think of your entry :/


  • Sticks-And-Stones
    January 27, 2008

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    OMG!

    I LOVE IT! lol, Alice is amazing, and of course who wouldn't love Jasper. This sounds like what Alice really would wish for him! Thanks for entering and good luck!

    • LoneFairrie
      January 27, 2008
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      Thank you.Alice is my favorite Female Character in the book, and I had been toying with the idea of writing one from her point of veiw for Jasper then I saw this and said What the Heck, why not?

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