Giving! Living! Loving! Losing!
a few of the roles I have to play,
In the land of Alzheimer's
where my gran is there to stay.
So what would you do when you can't tie your shoe?
remember how to wash and dress or toddle to the loo?
Very simple daily tasks, both for you and me
But in the land of Alzheimer's even these fail to be!
Her mind is forever clouded, even thinking is a chore
I think I was a grandmother, I had people I did adore.
But in the land of Alzheimer's the faces she ignores,
unable to remember that once she loved us more.
I danced with her the other day,
she laughed and giggled oh so much.
Feelings of hopelessness for a moment out of touch,
but in the land of Alzheimer's I guess you'll never know,
how hard it is to leave you there and never take you home.
A contest entry
- Alzheimer's Poems by Cherokee.
1750 points, ended February 3, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Living With Alzheimers Or Dementia by CountryCousin.
1500 points, ended March 27, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very nicely written piece on the awful consequences of this horrible disease, from sufferers and relatives alike. I just wish more money went on research and treatment. If care homes had more staff it would help too, as we can't give the individual attention that we'd like.
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Yes I know.
Today my patient did forget that she had to go to the potty chair to urinate. She was still sitting on a bed that was unmade when my relief arrived. You too know this disorder very well.
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Very well written and sad piece. The words and flow were very effective in conveying the emotions and making the reader feel. Thank you for sharing.
Lauren
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deep
i like the way it flows it has a lot of deep emotions in it and its so true, keep writing -Amy
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wow this brought tears to my eyes I have heard about the disease but never reaslly understood it but your words describe alot in this just wow well done
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I've read a lot about this particular disease and you brought it to the reader so greatly. This speaks so much of pain and hurt, yet about beauty that can be found in life, even while during this hard disease. Wonderfully written!
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This is a dreadful disease and the number of people that are afflicted with it continues to grow each day. Dimentia has to be one of the hardest things. Not knowing anyone or what you are supposed to do. It is scary. Thank you for sharing this with me. Keep writing poet.
seamaiden ♥
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Aw wow. So sad..
But I definitely liked how the format of the poem sounded so cheerful; it contradicted with the actual matter of the poem. (Listen to the song "Lollipop" by Mika and he does the same thing.) -
interesting choice of the rhyming scheme with the subject matter; i think it kind of reveals a reversion back to a child-like state that comes with the unfortunate disease of Alzheimers. i really like how you call it the "land of Alzheimer's", like it is a fictional world not easily attainable by most people. it really shows the divide that is created by the disease. good job!
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This is such a sad poem... But, with such an upbeat tone to it... I really liked the rhyming, and the flow... it really was a wonderful write...
Great job
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Oh, this was soooo sad. I've never really been close to someone who had the disease, but I know how bad it is, which you really delved into successfully. Good luck in the contest.
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Alzheimer's is a sad condition, some people can't/won't understand it, but this is a well written piece and the emotions run deep.
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This is so sad! but unfortuntelly very true... I know that my grandmother had to be tested for this, she couldn't remember how to make toast, it is such a sad disease. It's hard to believe that the mind totally forgets, I have heard stories that some people can relive events that has happened 30 years before and they think that it only happened 2 hours ago. Very sad... one thing that I have found fascinating about this disease though is that when a person with alzheimer's die they die in the fetal postion, (the way they were born) very mind boggling. Great write mum!
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So true and so sad
Its the most heart breaking to have this disease for its in and out and living in both worlds the pain never ends .
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Touching write for an insidious disease....I know a few people whose lives have been touched by this..it is heart breaking for the remaining loved ones.....I hope your gran is able to find some peace......
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Oh yes, this is so understandable for those of us who have loved ones in this situation. Liked the flow and the message you convey through these words. Good rhythm and rhyme as well. Such a sad state to be in, more so for the loved ones than the person with the disease, as they do not remember anything.
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Aw, that was wonderful, strong images and the ending was excellent, well done to you,
regards,
Floorboards.
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Oh..that was such a lovely poem
I really enjoyed how you flowed with us the imagery
and emotion with just a touch of rhyme!
Beautifully done!
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Kathleen/Seattle, WA.
America
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Very nice poem conveys the youthful exhuberence of some who are unfortunate to be in the position of having this tradgedy inflicted upon them.
The use of the rythm and rhyme is infectious making the reader hurry for more BUT,
Only one comma at the end of a line? -
this is so good gets across the message with such honest hope x
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this is a very tounching poem to me for my mother has this. I think that you wrote it very well indeed. i do thank so very much for shareing this poem of your. i hope that you will have a great night
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Good to see you writing again my friend. A very touching piece of writing from you here and very well written. Good luck in the contest. Kenny
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So very incredibly touching, you have done a great job at giving everyone a feeling of what it is like to have a loved one suffering from Alzheimer's. Your poem is so heartfelt it brought a tear to my eye and I hope you and your granny get to have more special moments like that! Great rhyme and flow! Good luck in the contest!
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