Honey if you're going to be
just like everybody else I've met
would you be so kind
as to let me know?
I'm not looking for a lover,
I'm just dying for a saviour.
who looks into my eyes,
and tells me all my secrets.
So if one night you're going to hold me,
and then go blind around your girl,
would you please just let me know?
So I don't have to waste my trust on you.
Author notes
Sometimes I really hate men.
A contest entry
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600 points, ended February 17, 2008, 49 entries
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Critiques?
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This is great, and stunning. It's full if anger and betrayal.
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Thank you for your honest entry and I often do too, as I have been more hurt than loved by them, good luck in my contest, Josie
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this is a good write.
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I agree.
Nice.
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so true
i like the emotion and the feeling you put into this short and nice flowing poem, good luck on your contests, keep writing,-Amy
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I feel the same way,
men at times well ARGH lol
Great job and good luck -
I can totally relate right along with you.
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wow, men arnt always the enemy in relationships. Dont give up on them just yet.
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This is so well written. I'm sorry you've been made to feel like this and I agree, sometimes I really hate men too but there is a savior out there for all of us... I think I've found mine. Best of luck to you in finding yours and the best of luck to you in the contest
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Sorry to do this to you, but I need to remove you. I forgot to turn off the prewrite feature, and I am looking for fresh writes. Again, I'm sorry!
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Fair play.
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Well Done
Very well written it brought a tear to my eye. XxX
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