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Broken Love of the Vampire and the Angel

Chapter one The Vampire

Walking in moonlight
Eyes are like flames
I’m no longer human
I no longer have a name

I walk around the streets at night
Looking for someone to kill
Looking for something to appease my thirst
Looking for my fill

Many people fear me
Many don’t believe I’m real
But I have wandered for hundreds of years
And I still know how to feel

I can’t see my reflection
And I can’t walk through fire
I am a creature of evil
I am a real vampire

Garlic cannot hurt me
And I can’t touch a cross
My soul is still inside me
That, I never lost

I can still feel like a human
I can still love and hate
But I can never be killed or die
And that is my horrid fate

One night I entered some ones house
Didn’t make a sound
And I can never forget that moment
Can’t forget the thing I found


Chapter two The Angel

I am a creature of mercy
I am a saver of souls
I ignite the fire
When human’s hearts are coals

I can take people to heaven
Or I can take them to hell
I can help them find their way
When they can’t help themselves

Many don’t believe in me
And others only do in times of pain
They all play with God and faith
They should all be so ashamed

I look just like a human
And I feel like humans too
I can feel happiness
And I can feel blue

I can fall in love
And I can almost hate
But I can never live like humans
And such is my burdened fate

One night someone came into my house
I hadn’t heard a sound
I can never forget that night
Can’t forget what I had found

Chapter Three Vampire heart

That night I saw an angel
Sleeping in her bed
I could see her in the darkness
I could see her resting head

I felt my soul tighten
As I watched her in her sleep
I could feel something different
Something that was warm and sweet

I walked over to her bedside
And brushed her hair aside
I looked down at her perfect neck
And felt a familiar hunger inside

I leaned down to take her
But I couldn’t finish the deed
Something was growing inside of me
Like an uninvited seed

I took another step forward
And looked at her beautiful form
Pressing my cold hand to her face
Her skin was soft and warm

The angel opened her eyes
And looked into the dark
I didn’t know if she could see me
Lurking like a hunting shark



Chapter Four The Angel’s Dream

I had fallen asleep that night
And dreamed of my home up above
Of my beautiful god
And of a singing dove

I began to feel uneasy
As my dream came to an end
The white clouds all came crashing down
And the colours began to blend

I could feel something cold
Pressing on my face
I could feel the darkness in the touch
From something that had fallen from grace

I opened my eyes in my dark room
And saw a pair of eyes burning red
And I began to wonder
If I was to end up dead

I sat up in my bed
And attempted to scream
But then the eyes disappeared
And I figured it was just a dream

I fell back on my bed
And tried to fall back asleep
I tried to close my eyes
I even tried counting sheep

Ever time I tried to sleep
I saw those deep red eyes
Full of fear and longing
Full of dark surprise

Who was that creature of my dreams?
Was I obsessing about a dream?
And why did I take comfort from its stare
This was just as crazy as it seemed



Chapter Five The Vampire’s  Realization

I ran from the angel’s bedroom
Before the angel could see
Why had I let her live that night?
It wasn’t normal; so unlike me

I walked away from her house
And found another victim
I passed by a lonesome church
And heard a godly hymn

It reminded me of the angel’s beauty
And the feeling that I had
I had never felt that way
It was neither good nor bad

I had felt my very soul
Like I never had before
Like I was feeling for the first time
Like I had finally opened the door

Is this what love felt like?
Is this how I am supposed to feel?
Is that why I let her live
And walked away like she was no big deal?

But how can I love an angel,
A heart that isn’t cold?
Something that is warm and pure
With hair of shimmering gold?

I pressed my hands to my head
And tried to ignore the feeling inside
I couldn’t love an angel
Knowing that, my soul almost died

The nights afterwards I went to her home
And watched her sleep again
Maybe I could have cured this feeling
If I had killed her then

One time the angel opened her eyes again
And told me not to leave
Could she really be talking to me?
I just couldn’t seem to believe

“Just kill her now,” My instinct told me
“And save yourself the pain
Kill her while you still have time,
Before you go insane!”

I could smell her sweet, sweet blood
From halfway across the room
But I could feel my killing nature subside
Like it was pushed into a tomb


Chapter six The Angel’s Confrontation

For many nights after the first
I saw the red eyes again
But they didn’t frighten me anymore
Like they did then

Finally I told the thing to stay
So I could ask it why it came to me
I wanted to know what the creature was
I wanted to be able to see

I turned on the light near my bed
And looked at the thing standing near
I saw he was a creature of the dark
But that fact had brought no fear

His face looked torn between feelings
Between tenderness and pain
He never took his eyes off of me
And the spot where I had lain

I asked him why he came to me
And his answer was a surprise
He said that he knew he loved me
And then he began to cry

His tears were dark and red
Streaming down his pale cheek
Falling onto my hardwood floor
On his face they left a streak

I looked at him a moment
And knew he didn’t lie
“Why are you so sad?
Why did you begin to cry?”

“You can never love me,” He answered quietly
“You are innocent and I am evil, and it’s clear to see,
You are a holy angel
So it’s something that can’t be.”

Chapter Seven The Angel’s Confessions

Before I could tell him
The truth or the facts
That these things were possible
He left my room in a flash

But every night he returned to me
And we would sit and talk
Often we would leave the house
And go for a moonlit walk

Every time he left my side
I always felt alone
I missed his company and beauty
And his voice’s melodic tone

I soon began to realize
That I was falling in love with him
I knew that he wasn’t right for me
I knew that it was a sin

One night he came to me
With blood on his perfect lips
I wiped it off with my hands
And traced his mouth with my finger tips

He rested his head in my hand
And I felt his skin, so cold
I leaned my face close to his
And he flinched at what he was told

“I can’t seem to help it,
But I love you too.
My hearts never beat like this before
And I know that it beats for you.”

He pressed his evil lips to mine
And held me in a strong embrace
I could see the hurt in his eyes
And the pain on his perfect face

“You walk in daylight
And save people before they die
I can only kill to live
And walk when there is no sun in the sky.”

Chapter Eight The Vampire’s Goodbye

A few weeks ago the angel told me she loved me
I hadn’t wanted this to be so
I didn’t want our love to blossom
I didn’t want the feeling to grow

My feelings for her made it harder
For me to decide to leave
I wanted to pretend that she didn’t love me
But then again, I still wanted to believe

I went to the angel’s house
And kissed her sleeping cheek
She looked so helpless lying there
So fragile and so weak

I left a note on her pillow
That said that I had to go away
So she could go on living like she did
Before she fell in love with me that day

I signed it with the words “Your love”
And then walked out her door
Knowing I would never touch her warm skin again
Or be able to see her anymore

My soul felt like it was on fire
As I walked away from her home
It felt like it was becoming heavy
Like it was turning into stone

I knew she would never forgive me
And I knew that was for the best
Maybe now she could move on
But I couldn’t change the feeling beneath my chest

Chapter Nine The Angel’s Tears and loss

I woke up one morning
Wondering why he had not come the night before
Then I found the note he left
And saw the open door

I began to cry for him
And crawled back into bed
I couldn’t bring myself to believe
The words that I had read

I didn’t feel like saving souls
Or worrying about other people’s fate
I wondered if I could still find him
Or was it already too late?

I waited for the night to fall
And walked the streets of town
I searched everywhere I could
And felt the rain come down

I welcomed the cold raindrops
They reminded me of his cold skin
I couldn’t let fate pull him away from me
I couldn’t let fate win

Finally I grew to tired to walk
And fell asleep in the rain
My body began to shiver
All thoughts had left my brain

I woke up in my bed
And wondered how I got back
I found another note from him
Written in midnight black

Please don’t try to find me
I know its better this way
I wish I could still be with you
I wish that I could stay

But we are not meant for each other
No matter how we wish we were
I know our love will never die
I know there is no cure

I am a creature of evil
I belong in the night
You are a creature of salvation
You belong in the light

I will always love you
Like you love the singing dove
I wish you all the luck in life
Goodbye my angel, my love

I began to cry again
And it seemed it would never end
I knew I would never love again
And my heart would never mend

I waited up every night
For my vampire to come back to my side
To hold me in his arms again
To make this aching in my heart subside



Chapter Ten The Vampire’s day in the light

I hid in the shadows of a building
And watched my angel in the sun
I knew that I couldn’t leave her
I knew she was the one

I watched her golden hair
And her skin shining so bright
Oh how I wished I could join her
In the land of the light

I reached my hand out towards her
And felt the sun seer my hand
I pulled back my arm
And cursed the day I was damned

My angel looked in my direction from the empty street
And saw me standing there
She began to walk towards me
All I could do was stare

I knew that I should have run
But I couldn’t resist her any more
My soul was aching for her
And it opened like a tender sore

I couldn’t let her love me
No matter how much I wanted her to
I walked into the sun
It was what I had to do

If I had let her love me
She would have been thrown from grace
I couldn’t take her from her life
I couldn’t take away her one true place

She tried to use her body
To shield me from the sun
But I wouldn’t let her stop me
Or stop what I had begun

I had to do this for her
I had to save her soul
I couldn’t let her be damned like me
I couldn’t let her skin become cold

She was too pure to become evil
To innocent to kill
I finally felt I did something right
As my body became still

Chapter Eleven The Angel’s Final Sin

I had tried to save my vampire
As he sacrificed himself for me
This aching feeling in my soul
Wouldn’t seem to flee

I cried for many weeks after
And barely even breathed
I couldn’t stand the feeling;
The spell that love had weaved

Every night I dreamed
Of my beautiful vampire and I
Of how our love seemed so pure
About the day I saw him cry

I relived our passionate moments
And every second we shared
Of how he had left me alone
Because of how much he cared

I had taken his body
To a lone grave beneath a tree
I hoped that he had found peace
But cursed him for doing this to me

I would rather have been evil
And been right by his side
Than to have him save my soul this way
I felt like I had died

I went to his grave one day
And cried upon his nameless stone
I felt so far from God that day
Why had He made me go through this all alone?

I told myself that life cheated me
To justify my last sin
No longer would I be without my vampire
Or live in what had been

I took a dagger from my room
And plunged it into my heart
I fell upon his grave and sighed
I would have a brand new start

I would be able to be with him
Forever in the after life
He had taken his life for me in the sun
And I did the same for him with this knife

With my last breath I laughed at the world
“You can’t keep us apart.”
I could almost see my vampire
With the coming of the last beat of my heart...

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  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    November 23, 2008
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    Thank you for your deeply expressed entry, Josie


  • Resokona
    October 24, 2008

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    WOW

    THIS IS REAY LONG BUT IT IS AMAZING. IT ALL SHOWS THE SAME AMOUNT FO FEELING THE WHOLE WAY THROUGH UNTIL THE END WHERE IT REACHES IT MAXIMUM. THIS POEM IS ABSOLUTELY FLAWLESS I THINK. CONGRATULATIONS FOR THE BEST PEOM I HAVE READ YET.


    • Zane Rose
      November 20, 2008
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      I'm very thankful for your kind words. Thank you very much. I'm glad you liked it! ^^


  • BehindTheShadow
    October 1, 2008

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    Holy long! I am not usually into things this long because, quite frankly, I have a short attention span. I forget what I read at the beginning by the time I get to the end. Overall, though this was a quality piece, and I appreciate you sharing.


  • RunningFromReality
    September 29, 2008

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    This was beautiful!! I especially love chapters 7 and 9 -^^- Your rhyme was done well, and it kept me hooked the whole way through. Thanks for entering, and good luck!!


  • lovemedeath
    September 5, 2008

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    wow!!!!!!!!1 i loved it!!!! tat painted the picture in my head, i could see every thing as it was in the story!!!! great job!!!! keep up the awesome work!!!!

    • Zane Rose
      September 5, 2008
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      I'm very glad you liked it. This is my favourite poem so it makes me smile when other people like it.
      Thanks again!
      ~Allie~


  • okadadokie
    July 25, 2008

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    This is byfar the bast vampire tale I have ever heard, besides Twilight of course, but close. Great job.

    ~Oka/KC


  • GossamerAlice
    May 28, 2008
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    This. Is. Epic.
    Thank you! XD
    I'm sorry I can't say more u.u you just left me speechless.


  • Simply Simple
    May 18, 2008
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    I got bored so I decided to come back and read this one again. I love it so much.

    I hope you don't listen to those who tell you to change it. It's perfect as is. I'd love to see what you would've done with it had they both lived.


  • Re-invention silver member
    March 31, 2008
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    wow.... i guess i read it to half.. lol. to be honest I don;t like long story poems.. but from what I read it seems good... perhaps and if you wnt, you should try to do a shorter version of this poem... its really good but too long for my attention problems lmao!.. besides that thanks for entering!


  • Exit-Stage-Right
    March 29, 2008

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    There are 394 lines in your poem and a total of 353 instances of I (208), Me (68), My (65), Mine (1), Myself(2), You (17), Your (1) and Yourself (1). A tight edit could bring the grand total down to a couple dozen.


  • Ms Raneika
    March 12, 2008

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    My first story in my contest I thank you for entering my contest this was a very dark and interesting piece

    Love, Raneika


  • takemypainaway
    March 11, 2008

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    this is a good poem but i feel that it is a little

    choppy at points...

    this is a great story line but seems like to mush was

    focused on length and not the strength

    but overall a very nice poem!!

    thank you for entering!!

    **kat


  • Rev Alimae gold member
    March 8, 2008
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    In awe.

    After reading this I can honestly say I am no poet. Infact I am seriously thinking of pulling my poem from this contest for I have no chance and look to be a crag in the flag stone next to your beautiful rose of a masterpiece.

    I bow to you and respect thy works for they are a wonder.

    Rev. Alimae

    • Zane Rose
      March 9, 2008
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      thank you

      Thank you so much for the comment. I can honestly say I have never gotten a comment like that. It really means alot to me that you would say that. I really hope you DON'T leave the contest. lol.
      ~EnJeru~

  • Simply Simple
    February 23, 2008

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    OMG!!! I loved this!!! It was like Twilight all over again! All I'm going to say is welcome to the finalists list. This is the by far my favorite entry so far. Great wonderful perfect write!


  • Sticks-And-Stones
    February 19, 2008
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    Wow this poem is AMAZING! I love the description and emotion in it! Great job!


  • Perfectly Imperfect
    February 6, 2008

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    I have to come back and read the rest of this, my attention span isn't quite this long, but I like what I've read so far, and I thank you for your entry x


  • LoneFairrie
    January 28, 2008

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    I like how you broke it up into "chapters"

    The first "chapter I really liked. I thought it really captured the vampire in it.

    In the third stanza of chapter two God should be capitolized. Its a symbol of respect for him, and its proper grammer in the english language. I like how you describe the vampire and the angel in a similar fashion, they are both like humans emotionally but they can never truely be like them.

    I liked chapter four. It reminded me very much of the Edward-Bella type love-start.

    Chapter Four was very close to me personally becuase I have had the dream of those deep red eyes

    "kill her why you still have time," I believe should be "kill her while you still have time." I love the last stanza of chapter five. It was very vampire in love.

    Chapter six, stanza four, line one. The first word should be 'his' not 'he' or you should remove the word 'face' either way would ifxe your gramatical error. I feel for the vampire with his tears of blood :'(

    I can tell that this is going nowhere I want to go. Your going to make me cry.

    What a masochistic vampire. or as Edward put it "What a sick, masochistic lion"

    I feel sorry for them both. But this is more Edward-Bella-esque then you let on.

    Wow I have another suicidal vampire. That's two in as many weeks, I'm becoming depressed.

    Wow. Suicidal vampires and angels?
    ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~

    This was very well done. The above are my respose to each chapter, as I was reading. Over all I thought it was a very excellent poem. Great Job.

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