I call here the Lord of Humankind,
The axis 'round which all things wind;
I call Him here for thanks and praise,
To credit Him for all my days.
Thankyou God for leaving man
To drown and die in flooded lands;
Forgive them for making you mad,
And forgive those who misunderstand,
For Your children deserved nothing but death.
Thankyou God for guiding man
Over the fields of no man's land;
Forgive the ones who thought they can
March through these men and take command,
For they too were guided by the strength of Your hand.
Thankyou God for Your perfection,
The rage you waged up in Babel;
For perfection requires mortal anger
And damning Your children to Hell.
But most of all we give You thanks
For allowing marches beneath Your name,
For every nation and every land
Has had the honor to make that claim;
We thankyou for the ruffled feuds,
The Christians, Muslims and the Jews,
To allow all us to kill and maim
Under the banners that read Your name.
Our Lord,
We trust in You, Your acts as well,
For betrayal's not being damned to Hell;
For You're the almighty Lord of men,
And we are naught but You're children.
Amen
Author notes
A prayer inspired by the quote,
"If you trust in HIM...Trust in HIS acts as well...
HE never betray his children...and You are one of HIS child..."
--Unknown
A contest entry
- You are one of HIS child... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended February 10, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This very inspirational!
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Jaw-dropping
*stands and applauds*
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It is well done. I like how the one-liners come in. We blame everything on God, when he does not interfere between our cause and effect in our play world, otherwise we'd never fix the cause.
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It's lovely to see some metrical verse on this site. Excellant job with that. I think as you capitalize the referances to god, one has a readiness to emphasize that word, which a couple times off-puts the meter, but it's nothing problematic as soon as you get the feel.
You missed one in "the rage you waged up in babel."
I really enjoyed the sardonic vibes here, short of blatant disdain, but not too subtle. An interesting (there's that vague word again aha) conflict of ideas.
I think stylistically I appreciated the first stanza the most, though it was the largest section that I most connected with. haha I'll be honest, those first lines were, topically, a touch repulsive when clashed with my principled skepticism, but it turned out very much all right. Good work.
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wow dude, I like the satirical tone in it. Your emotion is vividly expressed. I think the only thing keepin me from bein all in it is it seems God bashin.I like it tough. Props.
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We trust in You,
Your acts as well,
For betrayal's not
Being damned to Hell;
For You're the almighty
Lord of men,
And we are naught but You're children.
Your words are so true and so impressive my friend..well done..
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what must be remembered is that the bible was written by humans, and many humans use it as an excuse to do sinfull things.
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we create pain through thoughts and deeds, God is truely kind, he teaches us and never leaves our side. your poem brings this truth as difficult as it is to understand, he is loving and is very patient. God bless
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