I want to write us off
to less than a phone call a month.
And if it's right, then it must be wrong,
according to the flight plan.
I'm your chorus once upon a verse,
dusting off each note with a sigh
for insightful minds can't get,
can't get more desperate than this.
Something that rhymes,
something that goes,
anything poetic,
any form of prose.
Line up, line up for your dibs on this;
this is me.
I've got a different way of putting it every time,
I need you to know that you're not mine
anymore than I don't want to be yours.
She talks of soul mates and love,
I see this crossed off as et cetera.
If it's oh-so-pretty and oh-so-French,
then it's my cue to sink this ship.
[Jump overboard.]
Author notes
'I can see that you're not beside me
But I still feel you shine inside of me.'
This was originally written as a song, so if it comes across as un-poem like, my apologies. =)
A contest entry
- you left this feeling here inside me by CarCrashHumor.
600 points, ended February 23, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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"I want to write us off
to less than a phone call a month.
And if it's right, then it must be wrong,
according to the flight plan."
"dusting off each note with a sigh"
"She talks of soul mates and love,
I see this crossed off as et cetera."
I like this piece a lot- it's original
the only part I didn't see quite fitting was the "[jump overboard.]" part... maybe because it was in brackets, but I don't know.
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Thanks so much!
Jump overboard was kind of in brackets because even I thought it didn't fit in. But as a song it was meant to be sung in the background. =P
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