Waking dust of cobwebs
saturated in silence,
brewing fire, left chilled
a living spector
of a phantom life.
Author notes
For the prompt
A contest entry
- 17 Words by Exodus.
300 points, ended January 29, 2008, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Let me know How this makes you feel, what do you think?
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Oh wow this is stunning.
Reminds me of black and white films and castles.
Really a wonderful take on the prompt, thank you
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this poem pulled me in and wouldnt let me go! great write
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A reader feels the vacummous vacant mist of alone floating in a mist of hopelessness.So much is eluded to metaphorically in this brief piece. Well versed piece.
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wow, that opening line sure makes one take notice
of what is to follow, and what follows does not disappoint. This is one profound read, excellent writing!
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A phantom life indeed...I so agree with the words here. This makes me have chills because of the awesome imagery that it has.
Well done.
Kari
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Wow, the imagery here struck me as somewhat dark and deathlike. Good luck in the contest.
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