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Gyroscope Journeys

Contentious little bitch you are
that counters when I go too far
your tug takes me in pirouettes
through stumbled times and past regrets
you set me down along a plane
and guide me when I try again.

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  • arezes mom
    March 28

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    nice i like this. u are pretty great... i really like ur first line it made me smile.
    take care,
    lissa


  • Valerien Raven
    March 27

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    A very nice, short poem.

    Straight to the point and very good range of vocabulary =].

    Very well written.

    10/10, Keep up the good work.


  • crivanea silver member
    August 5, 2008

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    really nice piece..and i love ur title..learned a new vocab.. ...good poem and an intersting topic..short and to the point


  • Riamh
    July 19, 2008
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    I adored this

    I really loved this poem.....It gave me a smiles.....and food for thought


  • Never.Give.Up silver member
    July 18, 2008
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    This is really good and reminds me of a dance I've seen one time.

    A wonderful write and I wish you Wonderful ideas for the future.
    congrates on the honorable mention.

    Rose


  • DevinCora
    July 18, 2008
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    wow very short and very hateful.... i like a lot of power and a lot of description and this did all that and nore..... good job realy its bloody brilant


  • crazymomma
    July 7, 2008
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    I really love the title because it goes so very well with the poem. I enjoyed the metaphore and imagery very much. Thanks for sharing. i look forward to reading more of your work


  • ModernXTimes
    May 30, 2008

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    Nice...

    I wasn't expecting much at first glance, but after I read it, I was thoroughly impressed. I've written short poetry and it's so difficult trying to get what you want to say in a few short lines, and you were able to pull it off amazingly. I also liked the two sides that you presented. One side lets you down, but it helps you back up again and guides you, so overall, it's pretty important right? Good job on the entry and good luck in the contest.

    Sincerely,
    ModernXTimes


  • CarCrashHumor
    February 19, 2008

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    wow! I'm impressed with how much you said in such a little amount

    this has a ring to it, that'll be in my head for a while now

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