Though alive
I walk through shadows
Unseen like a ghost
And though alive
I live in death.
A contest entry
- 17 Words by Exodus.
300 points, ended January 29, 2008, 13 entries
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awesome piece
ahhh this wuz deep, and to the point, I like it!! I like it alot!! Very few words, but so- so powerful!! Awesome write!!
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A strong piece
and a strong statement. I relate to this very well from my current point of view. Couldn't have been more clear.
Nice write.
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Excellent
Made me think for ages, 5 lines teasing my mind, what do they mean I asked myself so many times. Well now, they mean many things to me. We have to walk in shadows at times to appreciate the light. We often have to be unseen to give us time to watch and dream. And yes mans greatest fear, whatever happens when I die, you said it all in your last line: I live in death.
Only 5 lines but really powerful lines, smashing write
Bill
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Are you sad?
This winter I discovered depression.
Hey but I’m still here.
Fuck the shadows,
they are simply caused by fools
standing in front of our sun.
When I have enough wrinkles, pain and age
I will pass once more, through a birth canal
into the arms of a new mother.
Life is the great discovery.
Stoneage. Is getting stoned, but at least the crowd
has settled down, they’re throwing nerf balls at me instead of rocks.
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This resonates with memories in my own lifetime. And at times still find myself there too. To live,is to know these feelings and express them. Remember,"none are so blind as those who cannot see". In reflecting on this train of thoughts. It lends more alive essence of your being seen ,then those blinded to you being here.Events in one's life in heavy emotional upevil can make us feel this way. So.... basically,I'm saying in all of this. You've moved me. The intentional reason of writing poetry!
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Ah but Poet!
Death is an illusion ... Did you know? And this life is unreal ... it is but preparatory ... Do not care not to be seen ... Being invisible is special, for in the soul the true Light lives eternally.
Atmospheric write, and universal thought ... for our Home is not here.
Love to you, Pozo ... I was led here to read this poem of yours. And I send a thought of compassion to you.
Myra
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A very thoughtful and profound write, pozo. A most impressive piece. Your writing is very deep sometimes and always good
Love and
Mom
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This is truly a powerful thought sometimes i feel as if i am transparent and go unnoticed through life as if in death. keep doing well my friend
love the rev papa
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Wow, very interesting take on the prompt, certainly different than I would have thought given the song. Thank you
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I think that all of us live like this come to think of it
This was really good, and thought provoking.
Kari
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