Oh God
honor this to me and
that to someone else
that to me or
this to someone else
this does not make
any difference
you inhabit in my core
rule my rationality
putting your name on my lips
is the only wish I do
Oh God...
Author notes
Please send this poem to your friend. I send my consent. God Bless to you and to your friend. Take care.
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A contest entry
- A SPECIAL REQUEST [COMPETITION] by Fransb by FransB.
300 points, ended April 13, 2008, 28 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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This gives me silence and its lasting moment of peace and hope.
Keep sharing your gift.
HENSLEY
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Thank you
Your poem is good but falls outside what I was looking for- ode to the Most High God.
Thank you for entering my contest.
Keep writing.
I wish you the very best in your writing.
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Thank you for entering my short poems contest.
The contest states that it is for poems of 10 lines or less. This poem is over ten lines. -
The sincerity conveyed in this piece of
brevity extends well beyond words.
Lovely offering of what faith should encompass;
heartfelt devotion to alleviate humanity's struggles.
Blue
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"you inhabit in my core
rule my rationality
putting your name on my lips
is the only wish I do"
What a humble and sincere poem you have scripted here! A lovely prayer and homage for Maa. The photo is all-telling, and fits beautifully! Best wishes to you. Blessings!
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what a heartfelt prayer ...
so graceful and sincere ... what greater poem can one write than a prayer to the divine ...
you show us true devotion through your verse, and invite us to surrender our own will to divine will ...
when there is only god's name on our lips (nama-japa), our mind will be defeated ... and grace can flow ...
thank you so much for sharing so much wisdom in susan's contest,
marion
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i agree god does inhabit the core of everyone who welcomes him. great job with the write wonderful words of faith. god bless you
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Your entry is much appreciated, and I was looking forward to it - by know have come to realise your 'style'. The prayer is deep, and certainly contains in sincere way 'hope' and 'life', while there is also the knowing that the Lord can offer within us and through us this 'smile'. God bless you. Frans
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This is food for thought, it makes you stop and think about life and about yourself. I do love this about your work, how it tends to hit the spiritual core and embrace it. Well done
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I really like this but with no punctuation I can not place it
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Ah yes, I see this picture moved you too.A sympayhetic write in tune with the image.Good luck in the contest, Ros
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An inspired write...it isn't 'what' we have that brings us true joy, but 'who' we have within us....your simple lines make this a piece anyone can connnect with. (This contest image is a great visual of the gift of laughter.)Well done and best of luck in this contest. Peace, Rhonda
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Beautiful!
Laughter and tears can look the same sometimes
and beauty is everywhere on earth...
'put laughter on my lips
is the only wish I do'
BRAVO!!!
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very good
interesting expression shown here. it is clear and understandable, but profound. my wish is that more of us could embrace this attitude in our supplications.
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I like this prayer
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beautiful take on the prompt...laughter and wishing for others to be full of joy is beautiful...best to you in the contest~ Blessings alwasy~ Trisha
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