Tattered frayed ropes run around her heart
Constricting her breathing
She keeps her hurt inside
Using a chrome mirror to send out a reflection
That isn’t really her
That is what others wish to see
Waterfalls of sadness
Flow through her body
Damaging her insides
With the tears she refuses to shed
She refuses to show the world
How much she hurts inside
She was always taught it was weakness
To show how you truly feel
Her mirrors getting rusty
From the tears that hide behind it
Give her a reason to let them go
Let her cry those healing tears
She’s always been forbade
Author notes
prompt *What happens to all the tears we do not shed?
Jules Renard (1864-1910)*
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A contest entry
- Let's Do This Quick Like Bunnies by Jasmine Rayne.
310 points, ended January 30, 2008, 5 entries
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I really liked this. I could tell which quote you picked by the second stanza. I really enjoyed this piece. You've done a wonderful job! ^_^ Thanks for entering and good luck.
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I think you should change "flayed" to "frayed"
It seems to fit better
But otherwise, I think it was a wonderful write, love
Good luck in the contest =)
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This is beautiful sweetheart goodjob with this pieceand goodluck in the contest best wishes and much love always
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Wonderful..so many tears dry up so...
All the best dear!
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Stunning and beautiful sweetie...I know how rusty a mirror can get when we hide, and don't let the tears out...best to you in the contest ~blessings always ~Trisha
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beautifully written from the promptand i felt i could relate to this in some ways justamazing sis well done
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really good sis
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Darling this is sad and so beautiful.Thought Provoking and intense.Good luck in the contest.
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