Captured-
A rainbow hummingbird in your filigree net
My heart fluttering and straining against the
Inevitable
How did I not see this coming?
A nectar to sweet to resist
I was lured
Ever so slowly, you untangle one hued wing
Then the other
All the while whispering sweet nothings into the air
To calm and sedate me
Until, at last, I sit wholly contented in your palm
Then with one calculated look, you clip my pinions
My tail and all the secondaries I have
You clasp a ring about my foot to a
Matching circlet about your finger
And I sing my song of rejoice
For what do I care if I can't reach the skies
Or race the winds to the ends of time?
So long as I sit to be admired by you
The rest of the world has ended
And your eyes hold all the promise I need
In a list
A contest entry
- meeting your love for the first time by loving.
300 points, ended February 2, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hummingbird, With A Twist. by Poetryintheblood.
450 points, ended April 25, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical comments, please. And if you PEEK, SPEAK!
Comments
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck, Josie
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The form of this poem is great, very unique, simple, and effective.It also has some very quotable lines "For what do I care if I can't reach the skies" is my favourite.All in all great poem!
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wow that is stunning. it is so powerful and leaves a very unique impression. i'm just enjoying re-reading this.
paragraph 3, last line - "rejoice" or "rejoicing"?
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cute and simple
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