As the incense burns I think of you
Through the smoke I get a glimpse of the way you look at me
Your eyes burn holes into my soul
You are the object of all that is lust to me
Through the smoke I get a glimpse of the way you look at me
Your smell is a familiar scent in the atmosphere of my home
You are the object of all that is lust to me
The mere sight of you drives me to my weakest point
Your smell is a familiar scent in the atmosphere of my home
The beat of your heart is a tune I've memorized
The mere sight of you drives me to my weakest point
Your touch is unlike any I've felt before
The beat of your heart is a tune I've memorized
Your voice my ear has learned to trust
Your touch is unlike any I've felt before
Who are you? How did you get here? Who let you in?
Your voice my ear has learned to trust
No man has entered the places you have discovered
Who are you? How did you get here? Who let you in?
I have longed for a love such as this always
No man has entered the places you have discovered
I'd not met him before you
I have longed for a love such as this for always
But you do not belong to me
I'd not met him before you
Until I met you did I find hope that he might exist
But you do not belong to me
I am held as a captive to my thoughts until he comes
Until I met you did I find hope that he might exist
The perfect one, who feels the same for me as I for him
I am held as a captive to my thoughts until he comes
As the incense burns I think of you
What do you think about this poem?
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Another heartfelt piece
absolutely. Searching and finding hope...deep words you have penned here.
Thanks for sharing,
E♥
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Good Morning, You have penned a beautiful poem full of romance and love. So very heartfelt. Your words were delightful to read. Wonderful imagery and flow to your words!! Excellent write. You take care, Sandy
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Wow..and welcome...what an explosion of feelings in this..the emotions of longing and bittersweet dripped off the pages....well done..I love this line.." I am held captive to my thoughts until he comes..."will look forward to more of your words....
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"No man has entered the places you have discovered
I'd not met him before you
I have longed for a love such as this for always
But you do not belong to me"
Loved how you repeated certain lines and phrases; this is an enviable write.
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I love it!
You did a great job, this obviously came from your heart and that is the best kind of poetry.
The kind that when you read it you feel the emotion of the writer and relate to their words.
I also think you did a great job with this form too.
I am not claiming to be a master poet, just someone who likes read and write poetry and someone who knows what sounds/feels real.
Great Job Poet!
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your off to a good start.. I like the ways this sings in my head.. your very pretty too=) thanks for sharing and welcome welcome
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A thing one has to remember is to write from the heart
you seem to have done this here
and opened your heart to the reader
With a touch of colour, and a pinch of imagery
you can be a mad poet like me
good write
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try and express this form and emotions in writing is
good way to start, I think you areat a good start, thanks for sharing
MM
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I like this, the pattern throughout the piece is new to me, so this was a pleasure for me to read, well done. :]
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This is quite beautiful! Very detailed in emotion and flow....I thought this was wonderful....keep up the good work....hope to see more...smiles, Terry
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this is pretty good...keep it up...practice makes perfect!
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This one had a better flow.Keep up the good work.
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