The first time that I heard you speak my name
I felt that I was born again as new.
From that day on I could not stay the same,
Every second of my life was now for you.
I couldn't see you when I should have done,
Was not my choice to fight that bloody war.
Of things I could have lost, you are the one,
That truly I believe worth fighting for.
Demobbed and heading home by train at last.
I saw your mother's face and then I knew,
That all my time of waiting had now passed
And I would see my one and only you.
She held you in her arms, you called me "Dad?"
And in that very second I was had
I smiled and I was glad
The fears I brewed while fighting far away
Were melted into love that very day
Author notes
#3 - Meeting someone who changes your ENTIRE life
OK well it isn't my entire life because I met my daughter in the act of being born and have never fought a war!
Oh and if you care it's a Caudate sonnet, as written by Milton, like me he was long-winded and didn't know when to stop.
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A contest entry
- 175th Contest by A. L. Armocido - AM.
450 points, ended January 29, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please comment below. Spelling or rhyming or scanning corrections welcome.
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This is a great poem.
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applaud thie good piece
This almost made me cry it was so full of love
and also gave me hope in the future for others in war. love this
. Rewarded 4
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This gave me chills. Well done!
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A man, c'mon!
This poem was so much better before I read the author's notes. The author's notes stated that it was not from personal experience.
But I did like reguardless that you love your daughter enough to fight for her in the war.
I will actually be going into the army right after I graduate which is why I was disappointed by it not being from personal experience. -
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Trouble is, the child in question could be told it was "Dad" and say so, so he must have been away for about 3 years. Modern wars don't work that way so, as I'm British, not involved in a war that went on long enough to have 3 year POWs since 1945 I'd have to be over 80, and I prefer not being
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The fact that it read as real I take as a huge compliment, that's the idea after all!
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The title immediately places the reader in the time and place of the poems intent. The content has a rhythm with a simplistic language used as the poet reveals the trials and tribulations that fazed him during his phase of enforced absence from home.Congratulations on the silver shiny for your mantle shelf.
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This is really sweet... I enjoyed the sonnet form and the tenderness and honesty you expressed was so endearing. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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well done here my dear,
best wishes to you in this contest.
Enjoyed this one.
passions
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