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frozen music
sounds and colours mixing
in a beautiful symphony of
      feeling;

blood red violins
    ebony piano keys

perfectly still

silence humming off their edges,
    sharp and defined againt the smoke & shadows

waiting
    anticipating,

a stranger's touch
to bring them back to life;

to release them again
let them run [poetically] rampant

destroying the silence

A contest entry

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  • perfectsunset gold member
    March 30
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    Ooh this was wonderful!
    Excellent imagery.

    Thanks for entering & best of luck


  • shtrdglassheart
    January 6

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    this is great.. i love this piece.. I paticularly like the contrsast between ebony and red two complete opposites..This is one of my favorites in my contest.
    Good luck
    <3shtrdglassheart
    Mandi


  • TChaplinette
    July 29, 2008
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    i liked it alot.
    the emotion the details, but there was just one thing.
    the way you described the colors red and black, i think it was "blood-red" and "ebony".
    i've heard those terms before.
    it would have had a much better feel if you had used different color descriptions.


    thanks for entering.
    and good luck.
    ♥taylor.


  • iamthebeatles
    March 11, 2008

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    this is a wonderful poem, so far you are the only one to describe sounds to the deaf. Very well done. It holds so much emotion and one can really get the feeling of what kind of sounds are flowing around. Great job and good luck.
    *peace*


  • Beautiful-Mistake
    January 30, 2008
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    What a great write. This poem scans perfectly, without feeling forced. The rhymes are clean. The grammar is straightforward and conversational. And all of that comes together to put forward a powerful message. All in all this made for a great read. I hope you keep writing such powerful poetry, and I look forward to reaading more from you. Excellent work.


  • missrockstar
    January 26, 2008

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    i like it
    i dont noe why but it kinda reminds me of the phantom
    of the opera even tho i barely watch the movie lol


  • whiterabbit.
    January 26, 2008

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    I really love this. It's so beautifully written. The imagery and descriptions are just wonderful. I love the way you wrote this. Amazing write sweetie.
    xx

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