A flowing grace
and a gentle touch
puts a smile on my face
Strong and intelligent
transporting my heart
to sweet place
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One day this is a compression
Please tell me what you think
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i think this is real
u rite well
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Wow!
What a beautiful compression, Robin! I know that "sweet place" well; I share it with someone very
special! As always, you write so beautifully in this form that you have created. I can't tell you how much I love reading your love poetry! As always...amazing!
Paula
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why not -- A grace which flows and a gentle touch
puts a smile on my face
Strong and intelligent
which transports my heart
to that sweetest place? yes/no? stronger or not? in such a short piece the use of ING words tends to stagnant the flow do you agree? yes/no? the gerund does not work in English only in Latinate languages this was very good as it was and i had the audacity to impose my views on you - i hope i have not offended but made a strong idea even stronger thanks for sharing and 'suffering' my at times asanine comments regards zaj
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smooth
i like this poem, its short and sweet, it gives me the mood of just falling asleep and relaxing. Its not very often that i read something tht makes me calm down or feel ok about loosing something, its helped me to see the light at the end of the tunnel, thanx for spening the points on putting this up, or i never would have read it
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This is a good poem.
You need to make it longer so the reader can feel what you are feeling in this poem.
Describe what you were dreaming.
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Very Good
Someone special makes you feel safe and loved, and you describe it well without being cute or too sweet. Thanks!
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