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I Love You

I stumble,
I tremble,
  lacking the,
    right words,
      to say:
I Love You.

I shiver,
I quiver,
  without the,
  right moves,
    to show:
I Love You.

I die,
I cry,
  without your,
  self here,
    to say:
I Love you.

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  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    July 20, 2008

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    Thank you for your lovely entry , good luck in my contest, Josie


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    July 5, 2008

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    Very beautiful and congratulations
    to you on your Gold trophy here!
    Good luck to you in this contest
    and thanks a lot for sharing it here!




    Jeremy0826


  • kel dog
    June 29, 2008

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    i love the peom. just one thing. the last paragraph. instead of i die, i cry. it could be i cry i die.
    it just makes more sense. but every thing else is great. it desribes me when i can't say the words right.


  • SchizoChic
    April 16, 2008
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    Nice form. Best of luck and thanks for entering.


  • workingharleylady
    February 3, 2008

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    nice

    I agree With Krys... i also like the form in which this is written. Sounds like someone really lost out on your love. Although it probably was written for the sake of contest,it has the feel of real pain.
    Warmly, Chrissy


  • Angel With No Halo
    February 2, 2008

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    very fluid and well written. Not too much emotion here, which I like to see in the writes I read, but you did a wonderful job in the form you wrote in. Thank you for your entry!

    ~Krys~

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