there she is
not saying a word
watching people's actions
and their faults
she tries to be like
but they put her down
no matter what she does
they'll keep saying it
likes it's nothing
she's the girl in the room
people taunt and trample over
holding her tears and anger
she feels like an Untouchable
in the 21st century
nobody wants to touch her
see her or have anything
to do with her.she's alone
with a crowd in the room
the girl goes home and cries
she wonders why they hate her
why they tease and blame
why they treat her so different
she thinks about her secret
the thing that can make her feel
so peaceful but be so dangerous
she lies on her bed
and sleep forever in the darkness
Author notes
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option 1
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Comments
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nice write..i liked it..and i could relate to that feeling back when i was in middle school and some og high school...its a horrible feeling..just to know that people judge others over the dumbest things..people are so ignorant..but all you can do is keep your head up ..and let them know that its not getting to you..thats all the bullys want is the satisfaction of making u feel bad..just because they are insecure about themselves..but like i said great poem...and keep writing...
*Yellie*
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Nice job! I really like the last stanza. Good luck in the contest!
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so sad this is lovely i really like this
it seems depressed with out being whiny
great poem
thank you for entering!!
**kat -
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This has a great feel to it, the words are amazing.Great poem!
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I really like this poem. I feel a lot of people can relate to it by ways they may have been pushed away by poeple before only because that can't be just like them. This poem is very heartfelt and emotional. Great write.
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This shows a lot of emotion and is very sad.
But there just seems to be something left out.
I noticed lines where there seemed to be words missing.
She tries to be like...... but they put her down.
A little editing and this could be a top poem.
I still like and I wish you good luck in the contest.
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It's good, but I think you can do better. Thanks for entering.
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This is so sad and it's sad that people have to deal with being treated like this. It's hard to feel like you don't belong.
One thing that I noticed is that it seems like you are missing a word in these sentences
"she tries to be like
but they put her down"
I really like the emotion that you put into this. Great job.
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hi well done super work very goo keep it up super
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