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Go-Getter!


you degrade yourself
for another dime
time away from the wife and kids
to appease this overbearing brute

you're a real go-getter (?)
more like a fetch
(good boy)
you pretend you are doing for the sake
of everyone
but instead of sacrificing for your family
you sacrifice them

hope that extra twenty a week is worth it

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Bootlicker

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  • Naridill
    February 6, 2008

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    This seems to have a personal ring within it, like acknowledge of dis-trust from someone. I feel the emotional strings you did pen with this, whether real or not. The implied emotions are intense.

    Thanks for entering,


  • penman gold member
    February 2, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Very creative and well done. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Tirrell
    January 26, 2008

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    very nice my friend, and quite a vivid take on the prompt, like the phrasing here! Best of luck.
    This is a very intense and powerful write, and rather nice.


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    January 26, 2008

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    a powerful take on this prompt really giving it so much depth i love the way this is penned.well done and best of luck