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Spineless

The charms of apple polishing
comes to wane in power,
when brought full
into the light of truth.

Could you stand upon your own?
Could you bite that hand that feeds?

Often the polisher
can not stand, less wallowing
in the dregs of his sewer;
for he has some faith,
as a shallow pool of filth.

Author notes

Opression is often the consequence, but seldom or never the means of riches-- Thomas Paine

For the prompt: Bootlicker

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  • Naridill
    February 6, 2008

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    An ending of true power, the depth of it and honesty - brutal honesty, just rips into the flesh. Nicely done.

    Thanks for entering,

  • imahealer
    January 27, 2008

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    This poem is VERY deep and only too true. If you don't mind, for the sake of "polishing this poem, I found a tiny but noticeable error, in you next to last line. The semicolon, (which means "and") should be a comma, making next line would be much stronger . Sycophants, leeches, users, MAKE ME SICK. Brilliant poem!


    Shana


  • FransB gold member
    January 27, 2008

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    Bravo, bravo

    what a write! Not only well penned, but it conveys thoughts to ponder. Your 'direct' approach leaves nothing in terms of certainty-uncertainty. Too the point this is and a magnificent take on the prompt. Good luck. Frans


  • Mrs. Serial Killa
    January 26, 2008

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    wow...great work!! IT MADE ME BE LIKE OH SCREAM...your work is always up to my expectations..great job my good friend


  • Tam
    January 26, 2008

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    ok...

    I must say...this may be one of the best writes I've witnessed based on a prompt...
    OUTSTANDING write Robert...I am very impressed with your insight but the ability to pen insight into poetic art is difficult...at best...yet this is wonderful!!!
    this is begging for tin, sir!
    well done on every level!
    Blessings! Tammy


  • suseann
    January 26, 2008

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    Etched ever so deeply on the walls and halls of truth! If one can't maintain their personal good charactor via actions. They are bottom feeders unworthy of notice.Very strong voice flows within the lines of a well managed composition in this piece.

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