My Words:
*original*, *personality*, *estimate*, graduate, *dialogue*, *inferior*, *incredible*, *stereo*, *chemistry*, *fatigue*
I'm a graduate driving down the road to no where
Stereo blaring music for all to hear
Feeling the wind breeze through my hair
Going where no one can interfere
I need to go where people show originality
Where I can be myself with no objection
I need someone that can relate to my personality
I hope I'm going in the right direction
I want to climb up a mountain high
And feel as tho I'm completely free
I want to spread my wings and fly
As I sail across the incredible sea
I want to take life's dialogue and rewrite
And change the chemistry by adding some spice
I want to fly a kite until its out of sight
To take a chance and role the dice
I will no longer feel inferior to the world around me
I will not give in and live a life that is fake
I would rather keep looking until I die of fatigue
And wont even estimate of how long this journey will take
This is the beginning of the journey of life
Author notes
lost-rose-petal
A contest entry
- Invite only word bank by Starz of Heaven.
525 points, ended February 1, 2008, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Any advice?
Comments
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Very Good! You sound as though you have a firm idea where you want your journey to take you! I like your descriptions of your emotions and dreams! I see some self confidence in there too! Congrats on your bronze trophy!
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Wow girl! Youve totally outdone yourself with this one. I literally felt like I was the one in your poem and it held me from the the first word all the way to the last. Awesome write as usual, love.
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Excellent
Outstanding use of the word bank.
Your flow and abab rhyming format is brilliant.
I also love the powerful message that you left in your poem
Love the following:
" I want to climb up a mountain high
And feel as tho I'm completely free
I want to spread my wings and fly
As I sail across the incredible sea"
WELL PENNED!
You don't need it but I wish you the best in the contest. I see a shiny here for sure
Much love,
~David~
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so crank up the tunes and put the pedal to the floor. Every road leads to somewhere. Cut all the strings on your kite and fly above the mountain of obstacles and restraint
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Wonderful message and write. Best of luck in the contest.
♥
whisper
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Your words:
original, personality, estimate, graduate, dialogue, inferior, incredible, stereo, chemistry, fatigue
Goodluck
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