Captivating the Mind
I find
is subjective,
if not selective.
One's sensibility
may not appeal to me--
but others may surmise
it a delightful prize.
A contest entry
- Looking for Favorites by just-an-amateur.
600 points, ended February 10, 2008, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
point out misspellings or things I can improve upon in a kind and friendly way--THANKS!
Comments
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Thank you for the beautiful entry! I'm not really good with rhyme but here you executed it perfectly. There's a bit of a hiccup in the flow on the second to last line for me. When I read it at first I had to reread that part a few times through before I could get it to match with the flow of the rest of the poem.
"but others may surmise
it a delightful prize."
Not sure of how you can fix that. But still, I enjoyed your entry. Best of luck in the contest!
~M~
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I think the first line is suppposed to be "captivating". This is a wonderful write! Best of luck in the contest.
♥
whisper
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Thank you for reading my poem and pointing out my obvious spelling error. Sometimes I seem to leave my mind at home, and don't have it fully functioning when I need it to be.
Thanks for looking out for me and giving me a hand (a thumbs up!)
David
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