Black eye my dear, No not tonight,
Not sure if I could take another fight.
Well just sit there you know the score,
Lie there darling, I'll kick you on the floor.
Ok I know it means “ I love you”
Though my eyes I can barely see through.
Smile love, don't mind the broken tooth,
Its how I show my love, living proof.
The nurses are taking care of me now,
Call you later, when I remember how.
Broken fingers, I'll dial with my toes,
Yes sweet heart you know how it goes.
When you come home we'll do something nice?
Broken cheek bone, stick your arm in a vice.
Sounds swell to me, think that will do.
Give it your best shot, turn the old into new.
Author notes
No this isn't happening to me. I just read a poem and a comment on it and this is the way it comes across. I know love is blind, but for goodness sake when do some see the light? I'm sorry but its really narked the hell out of me. My heart goes out to those who have to or have put up with domestic violence honestly.
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wow that was different but nice i loved it..
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I saw it only too well with an ex-girl friend... who used me to get out of an abusive relationship... but she also had to deal with family verbal abuse only to leave me and crawl back to another abusive marriage.
tis sad when some have to live their lives that way!
Keep telling the truth my friend!
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
Bill
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Powerful work.
Abuse...sad poem to read and even think about. You hit this one head on with the imagery shared. Good job Talia!
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this is quite heartfelt not a pretty story, though, my aunt stayed for years with a man like this and became mentally ill from it. she died an alchoholic. i've never been able to figure out why she stayed.
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Well I completely agree with you 100 per cent. There are far too many people out there going through domestic abuse and I cant understand for the life of me why they put up with it. "love is blind" is no exuse whatsoever... if that man *or woman* loved you they wouldnt hurt you. Thats that! Anyways this was truly a great write and touched my heart... too many people go through this
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and this is how they make sense of it all. it breaks my heart. very poignant write. well stated and flows well. i commend you on putting this out there, hopefully it will fall into the eyes of someone who is suffering from such a hell and open their eyes to how obsurd it is to justify / accept the abuse. having been in abusive situations and around them, i do understand how crippling it can be. but at some point you must grab the rope and start climbing out.
many blessings and *stomps
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hmmm... Very powerful poem here, quite powerful for something you are not dealing with. The emotion behind your words is very interesting too... It holds the poem together...
You use your words very well. I liked some of the lines such as:
"The nurses are taking care of me now,
Call you later, when I remember how.
Broken fingers, I'll dial with my toes,"
Great write you have here
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Hi, haven't been around in a while. This is quite powerful and I'm glad it's not a personal account.
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love the write its peices together differntly than most i've read but still it sounds great and has a powerful effect...<3mariah
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Dont touch
I am glad that some people arent afraid to speak up where others are! I've been through things and known others who've gone through worse and yet no voice was ever heard! This speaks volums and has a lot of imergery and boldness to it! It is well written and More women, more people should stick up for domestic abuse. And whats sad is it doesn't just happened to women it actually happens to me, and that satistic and abuse goes highly unreported because of "pride" I love reading your work! I know its been awhile since i've last been on and commented but girlie doesnt mean i've forgotten how brillent your mind is! Keep writing and I'll keep reading
One Love, One Life, One Voice,One Pen
Blessed Little One aka Mizz Khaos
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Wow.. stark and brutal!! Exactly what some endured...
So sad when someone feels trapped in this life and their spirit is even too broken to leave...
Very well written!!
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Wow! Nat! I'm glad you wrote this. Whoever you visited surely will see this. Nobody should ever put up with this. It's not right, at all! "Love is patient, Love is kind . . ." Love is not what is described in this poem. Good write! And just!--Kel
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I think this speaks volumes. Domestic violence is a horrible thing and I too often cannot see why people will continually stay to endure it, especially in NEW relationships. Old ones you can see how it eases in there and how the self esteem gets battered, but to go into one and take it from the beginning..I don't understand it. I'd be leaving post haste myself. Great job writing this, it flows well and makes an impact to be sure. Bravo!
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that sounds so incrdibly bad, my heart goes out to those who put up with such things...
i'm glad it's not you...
incredible write though!
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I know I shouldn't be laughing at this, but I am. This is an AWESOME write. I know it's such a vicious circle for some women caught in that abuse, but sometimes it does make you say, DAMN, when is enough enough? Great job!
♥
whisper
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