His eyes are my paradise
and gazing so deep within them,
his soul tells a never ending story to mine.
Author notes
Yellow-Rose, 'Lost in his eyes' Prewrite
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Comments
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beautiful! this took my breath away. wonderful write!
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i love that last line...seriously. i usually do not like short poems this this but i love this one. great job.
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short and sweet, but so beautiful.
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Short and to the point...
Great grammar...normally I would fret about capital letters, but this looks great without them. : -
this is short yet impacted with so much , a nice write.
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so much meaning in so few lines.
This hit home to me
Good luck -
A very cool look at the magic within a person's eyes. I love the view you give to the eyes, as well as the personification. A nice touch in a poem so small.
Keep on writing!
Blessed Be!
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