I have no fear of things material,
My fear is going to jail,
Six months minimum I'm looking at,
Could be up to three years
So I guess my fear's my freedom,
I have post traumatic stress disorder,
claustrophobia, agoraphobia and emphysema,
My husband has already been in jail for months
He's getting out two months before I go in,
Another fear I guess I have,
I've waited for him all this time
but will he wait for me?
My wrists are bruised from handcuffs,
I've slept in Brisbanes streets,
To get home and get arrested again,
Jail tis not a good place to be
I'm scared also for my husband
and when he gets out of jail,
I got evicted while he was in
and so he has no home to come to
I'm also scared of him,
He has ten breaches of domestic violence
and now I've lost his home,
I guess what I'm most scared of is to be helpless and alone
A contest entry
- Show me what scares you by Danna Hobart.
300 points, ended February 9, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is so harsh and sorrowful I'm sure it must be terrifying, i hope things work out and you get a minimum sentence,
Love Georgia xx
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This is probably the most frightening thing I have read so far in this contest, because it is so real, and it is something many of us can understand in many ways. I am sorry you are going through this, and I pray that things will get better. Thank you for entering this contest.
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Yes it is the being helpless and alone that is the great fear I think my dear... You have expressed this fear and lonliness so well!
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emotions by some kind of motions
poet for a deep breath
you've joined a difficult challenge as have I. to outside reader this piece appears to be a rough draft in some stanzas for competition's "show, don't tell" proficiency, which I know is hard to bring from explanation to observation understanding.
I think your relevance to feeling comes strongest with outcries of "claustrophobia, agoraphobia and emphysema" for intensity of your situation to go above average or general concerns with jail. Phrases as in set 4 bring up pictures emboldened with not wanting it to go deeper. that starts to shake for the contest's request. there's something of worry more than the words.
a stanza notched with "I got evicted while he was in
and so he has no home to come to" presented a fearful range too. It entailed a moment for timidity more than language of "I guess what I'm most scared of is to be helpless and alone" though that shiver should have its shout.
I feel for your situation and much heavier with the few sights, but I realize we don't only get insights from that.
fellow contestant with own shocker it's hard to color with right ink,
also called
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