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Winter's Wishing

Snow crunches
as I step,
crane-like,
into Dad's giant footprints,
still dreaming
I won't sink.








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Prompt: I wanna sleep in footprints.

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  • Iliad Keys
    January 28, 2008

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    Man. This makes me think of my relationship with my father, how I feel that it's hard to follow his footsteps. I like the briefness of the poem, how it captures and completes a thought, and then closes just as quickly. Nice!


  • Naridill gold member
    January 28, 2008

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    Love the ending - the start is a little lower in effort but still can feel the emotions and connections within. Nicely done.

    Thanks for entering,


  • Mirthryl
    January 27, 2008

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    Absolutely love the "crane-like" stepping! Perfect description!