Go ahead and take your pot shots
I'm an easy target
I'll take the noose from you
And throw it 'round my neck myself
Go ahead and eat your meals with me
Pretending we're still friends
But only converse with me
To make snide remarks and shut downs
I'm not going to point out
How petty and mean you are
You're making it quite obvious yourself
Every time you open your twisted mouth
And it's fine if that's the way you feel
You know I won't fight back
You know I'm an easy target
You know I'll sit and take it
It's just what I do
And go ahead and fake your innocence
I'll sit with your guilt
Around my neck like a chain
Bearing up under the weight of your hypocrisy
Go ahead and flirt with all the girls
So pretty, composed and virginal
But I know what you really are
And I know how sick you can be
I know that you're hiding from me
Is it too much guilt to see me
To know every time you look in the mirror
What a slimy disgusting piece of worm-ridden filth you are?
Is my face, my voice, my smile
The reflection of what's really inside you?
So go ahead with your little lives
I'll sit here wasting the days
Watching you pile on your hatred
And trying to break free.
Please tell me what you think
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An awlfully lot said here regarding feelings and probably things that have happened. It's usually good to get those feelings out and putting them on paper [or on AP] is a good way of doing that. I have to admit that in free verse I like things a little "clippier" if you know what I mean, with as few words used as possible to say what needs to be said.
Nice job.
Paul
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Oh. This is quite some poem that you have going on in here.
I don't know if it's based on something that you went through or are going through or what but it's sad to hear. I know that there are friendships like this where one person is just very abusive to the other and doesn't even seem to care. It's a very sad situation. I think you did a good job of expressing that.
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Zits and Dating
You capture the angst of this common experience in a way that is immediate, inviting, and at times transcendent. I liked it. The last couple stanzas lost some of the verve and nerve of the others, and it wasn't a satisfying ending. For example, the poem seems to be focused on one individual and then at the end it becomes a group. I would keep the focus. Check out my music at www.nakedadam.net -
Zits and Dating
You capture the angst of this common experience in a way that is immediate, inviting, and at times transcendent. I liked it. The last couple stanzas lost some of the verve and nerve of the others, and it wasn't a satisfying ending. For example, the poem seems to be focused on one individual and then at the end it becomes a group. I would keep the focus. Check out my music at www.nakedadam.net -
Zits and Dating
You capture the angst of this common experience in a way that is immediate, inviting, and at times transcendent. I liked it. The last couple stanzas lost some of the verve and nerve of the others, and it wasn't a satisfying ending. For example, the poem seems to be focused on one individual and then at the end it becomes a group. I would keep the focus. Check out my music at www.nakedadam.net -
Zits and Dating
You capture the angst of this common experience in a way that is immediate, inviting, and at times transcendent. I liked it. The last couple stanzas lost some of the verve and nerve of the others, and it wasn't a satisfying ending. For example, the poem seems to be focused on one individual and then at the end it becomes a group. I would keep the focus. Check out my music at www.nakedadam.net -
Zits and Dating
You capture the angst of this common experience in a way that is immediate, inviting, and at times transcendent. I liked it. The last couple stanzas lost some of the verve and nerve of the others, and it wasn't a satisfying ending. For example, the poem seems to be focused on one individual and then at the end it becomes a group. I would keep the focus. Check out my music at www.nakedadam.net -
Zits and Dating
You capture the angst of this common experience in a way that is immediate, inviting, and at times transcendent. I liked it. The last couple stanzas lost some of the verve and nerve of the others, and it wasn't a satisfying ending. For example, the poem seems to be focused on one individual and then at the end it becomes a group. I would keep the focus. Check out my music at www.nakedadam.net -
Zits and Dating
You capture the angst of this common experience in a way that is immediate, inviting, and at times transcendent. I liked it. The last couple stanzas lost some of the verve and nerve of the others, and it wasn't a satisfying ending. For example, the poem seems to be focused on one individual and then at the end it becomes a group. I would keep the focus. Check out my music at www.nakedadam.net -
Zits and Dating
You capture the angst of this common experience in a way that is immediate, inviting, and at times transcendent. I liked it. The last couple stanzas lost some of the verve and nerve of the others, and it wasn't a satisfying ending. For example, the poem seems to be focused on one individual and then at the end it becomes a group. I would keep the focus. Check out my music at www.nakedadam.net -
Zits and Dating
You capture the angst of this common experience in a way that is immediate, inviting, and at times transcendent. I liked it. The last couple stanzas lost some of the verve and nerve of the others, and it wasn't a satisfying ending. For example, the poem seems to be focused on one individual and then at the end it becomes a group. I would keep the focus. Check out my music at www.nakedadam.net -
powerful write. I can really feel your emotion.
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Ouch!
I really hear the pain from verbal abuse and put downs from your resident hypocrite. The questions in lines 28-30 are a bit out of place - if he's so awful, how is that areflection of you? The closing verse was a good summary of the damage the person is doing to themselves.
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What I was trying to say was that when he sees me now, it reminds him of what he did. I am a reminder of his actions. Perhaps I should have worded it differently though, I can see where the confusion would come into play.
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Wow... this was so... real to me... I could easily relate to the words you were saying. With the exception of a few parts, this could be taken as a relationship with anyone, maybe a family member or something like that... there was a specific stanza that stood out most:
"And it's fine if that's the way you feel
You know I won't fight back
You know I'm an easy target
You know I'll sit and take it"
It reminded me of the days I spent with my mother. And I really liked reading this, even though it was obviously about a lover (I assume.) I could totally place myself in your shoes. Nice write. -
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It was actually about 3 people. Part of it was about some 'friends' I had, and the other part about a former lover. So you were pretty correct
Thanks for the comment
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