Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

Incessant

...Frozen...

Incessant time,
Catches the air.
Infinite meaning
Deep, soothing, calm...
One word, spoken
From the heart
See inside?
Every beat bears,
A cost so deep
Given away,
Only to find...
The keeper
Has no care,
Leave the pieces.

...Incomplete...

Author notes

Ummm yeah so don't exactly know where this came from. I'll probably re-read this in the morning and think "what on earth was I thinking and why did I post it!" haha

Please tell me what you think

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments


  • Deke
    February 1, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    I like it! I think that we sometimes come up with our best at night when the rest of the family is asleep. We can think better then wtihout all the distractions.
    I think that you did a great job.
    Damon


  • im only half empty
    January 28, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    An to familiaur feeling.

    Great structure and flow. The first I've found tonight that actually keeps you drawn in.

    Short and to the point with great imagery.

    "Incessant time,
    catches the air."

    A great piece

  • Real Freedom
    January 26, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Prehaps it is that deep down feeling of having so much control and focus on life, and then suddenly you look at all the pieces. They don't stay togeather. You suddenly are overcome with this terrible feeling of, something is missing. You look deeper inside your heart and mind to understand. The deeper you go, the more you realize how small all the pieces really are. There is definately something missing. The mind and soul race to understand what exactly is going on. You get that feeling in the pit of your stomack as your heart beats faster, and your blood pressure rises. Your missing the glue of life. That substance that helps put all the pieces togeather, and make you whole. It seems that one could have fooled themself's into thinking that this substance isn't required, but with each passing day, you come to understand more and more that it is a need. That substance isn't a physical object or item, but infact it is a person. You feel incomplete because your heart and mind yern for that love that can only come from the one. As much as the rational mind tries to deny the need for this person, it is unstoppable. It is human nature to seek this special person that the father has placed here for us. I know these feelings all too well. Welcome to the late night thoughts that buzz my brain.


    It was a very good write indeed,
    Thank you for sharing
    Brandon


    • sweetgurl
      January 26, 2008
      Edit | Reply
      Thank you Brandon, I really appreciate it. I know exactly what you're saying. Take care and God Bless!!!
      ~Kate