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Crumpled word of mouth

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Shadows speak as reflections,

standing underneath -
looking straight into my eyes,

and waiting for tones of silence
to tell soft spoken whispers of missing you.










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Written January 25, 2008

25 words

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  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    March 26, 2008

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    I can see how this one gold. It is solid and really does speak volumes in few words. An outstanding piece of poetry in my opinion


  • leander Moderators member
    March 25, 2008

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    You have went quite deep with this poem, and definately managed to add lots of feelings within the lines of this piece.

    I like this device of word-economy, yet still carrying the ability of creating a lot of impact

    Well done - and thanks for the entry

    Leander


  • Celticmoon
    March 13, 2008
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    So few words but hard hitting to draw sighs from the reader. I love the depth of this piece. Few poets can truly write in few words and still carry such wonderment as this. I would offer more of a critique but I see no need for any such thing.
    Thank you for entering!
    Best of luck to you!


    Blessing
    Bel


  • Tangled Angle
    February 28, 2008
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    Simply lovely. Thanks for entering and good luck to you..


  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    February 17, 2008
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    Really beautiful


  • Dalaney gold member
    February 4, 2008
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    you're going to make me sigh and sigh again. Lovely entry. Lane


  • Naridill
    January 28, 2008

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    Yeah - I miss them too. You tell a tale oh too well



  • ams1020
    January 26, 2008

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    wow

    hey, hensley, galing ha... darn hard to make a poem with 25 words..even harder to do a good one.. well you've done it.

    continue writing and start dating hehe..


  • tara wilson gold member
    January 26, 2008

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    You know how I always say I really can relate to your poetry...well, this is another one of those poems..Hensley..this is beautiful, and what a play in the title there...an awesome, well written, heart felt poem... and 25 words..that is so hard to do...wonderful brevity...

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