You see a painting
It is of the world around you
You say its beautiful
Oh, if only you knew...
If only you knew...
whats deep inside
Whats behind all the colors
Find what the painting will hide
If only you knew...
Why so many colors are used
Why the texture changes
Why some spots look abused
If only you knew...
The story behind
For no one ever asked
So it remains undefined
If only you knew...
How spectacular it could be
If only you knew...
That painting was me
Author notes
option 1 "the ice bride"
A contest entry
- Will you be the one to catch her? by over the rainbow--x.
525 points, ended February 20, 2008, 82 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Picture Prompt contest - any form or style of poem by Mairi bheag.
800 points, ended April 5, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Now I know who everyone is, I can go round making proper comments.
I only allowed pre-writes at the last moment, and was pleased to find that a couple of people came up with good ones. Thank you.
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Amazing work! Surprise ending to me! Sounds like people only took the time to see you on the outside but didnt take the time to know the real you? People needed to look at you closer to see your internal pain. I am sorry you had to feel this way but I do love the poem!
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wow, this was lovely, && how you used the metapohors and such imagery, this was lovely, && i'm sorpry for your pain ]=
Thanks for entering, goodluck in my contest [=
♥
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this was amazing I love how you related how someone can feel to the world you have amazing talent great write
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AWESOME-POEM'''
VERY INSPIRING AND BEAUTIFUL POEM/WRITE... I LOVED IT...FINE PIECE OF POETRY HERE...'GOD BLESS YOU'...LOVE, SHIRLEY ANN SHAW-RAYTOWN,MO.......
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Whoa. I really like this one. The ending was amazing. Keep it up!
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hey! thanks for the comment!! nice to hear from ya again! glad u liked it!
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First thought...wow....This was very well written, very touching hun...I loved it!
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what I know is that we sometimes paint so many coats over the past that we forget that all the events, good and bad, are lessons learned that makes us what we are today.
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Very well written indeed! Love the ending...certainly was not expecting it.A vivid and emotional write
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Oh wow, very good. Interestingly, thought provokingly, brilliant. I kept me wanting to read on, to find out what this was exactly about and where it was going. And you lead it to a wicked ending, I didn't see that coming. Well done to you
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to be honest this is amazing, i like it, a true and powerful work of art this poem is in itself, keep it flowing
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I Love this....it is great...I love the metaphor and imagery and theme...its all amazing....
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Well Done!
Awesome work here Mindie!
This is very creative and well thought
out. I think that this is something
that so many of us can relate to.
We all walk around this earth with so
many unanswered questions and secrets.
We are all very different in so many
ways and have our own stories to tell.
Stories that are also very sacred and
dear to our hearts that we could never
disclose to another human being.
I think that it is very important to
get to know people in your life and
especially those that you have yet to
meet. There is a world of knowledge
and love out there that we should all
try to embrace.
Well done my friend and keep up the
wonderful work here! Always a
pleasure to read you!
Jeremy0826
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Wonderful
Such sweet descriptions and so romantic. Really is creative and well done.
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thanks dad. your comment means a lot to me. You are such a great poet that to have u say its wonderful must really mean that it is! thanks for reading!
Your AP Daughter,
L-R-P
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