Must I bribe the night to steal the moon
Place it upon thy window & make it bloom
must I pick a rose after moistening it with blood
press it with papers of poetry and make it bud
May I balm thy vandalized heart with heart of mine
and let them beat music of words, of similar rhymes
is it a blasphemy to be mad with poetic views
About the phantom of carousal & the love that fuse
To float and sail with words of thee
To a beautiful era of dead poets society...
03:16 am
26. January.2008
Dedicated to JOWELL
this is personal,i dont have any questions to ask..but you are welcome to comment.
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Excellent
What an enjoyable piece and beautiful tribute to Jowell...You used so very ardent metaphors....I got a lovely picture...........
novy
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overwhelming...
Dear Godlessbutdivine ,as I read your poems, my heart is assured that the Dead Poets Society is still "oh so fine".
Your lines are floating with music.You write rhymes and melodies to enchant the eye and the ear,thus the mind and the soul.
Keeep up the good work.
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you should watch the meter so that it flows but i was so inlove with the thought provking complex effort of the first two lines the imagery was catrptivating and truely genuisly written. Try not to place so many vocabulary words tha will mess the meter
i think it would saound better if you use more darker vocabulary moistening blasphemy is not the wordss to use here for this particular i think but this was good
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Oh how cool I loved this!
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impressive
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Your first line says it all - you've said that you comment in verse, I shall try
With thy words; poetic gift
From fall, a mind forever lifts
The views of those who read and see
A pleasure now, to have read thee.
Never ♥
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Whatever I'll write wont be enough,
For reading thine made my mind doff,
No words are found to continue what you'd start,
But some are honest to tell you thank you from the heart... -
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Don't allow my words to put you off
The flattery has been enough
Each poet has a rocky start
But you'll be fine - write from your heart
You will improve, better than me
One day you'll look back and will see
These words are true
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...Yet what we wrote is nothing but US
Put in words,bound in lines,creating mass,
What you did was nothing but read
One day will come&you'll surely be ahead. -
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This trick of time that no one knows
You win, you lose, the story goes
Play, stop, forward, pause rewind
My friend, you are not far behind. -
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I think you are right am not behind,
Enchanting you are as though you'r kind,
But what I mean is that I never look behind,
And since I don't,YOU came in my way,
And to TIME am greatful,for finding you this day... -
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At times it's good to look behind
So see what's past in times of mind
You only look to see progress
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Never for once i cared to see
Its only the pleasure of ecstasy
Never for once i seeked success
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I normally would not say this
But there is something that you miss
This world cares naught for no one else
Instead you should care for yourself
This means that in talks of value
It should be determined by you. -
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The world I mentiond titled POETRY,
Not the poisoned brains whose roads are cemetery,
I thank thee with respect for all thy care,
But now we should end it with a goodnight my Lady fair... -
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Goodnight to you, be safe, my dear.
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A free flowing, wonderful dedication, 
WOW!
This work is unbelievably beautiful.
Your rhythm & rhyme is sublime.
Right from the start...
"Must I bribe the night to steal the moon
Place it upon thy window & make it bloom"
You had me mesmerized, Scribe!
~ Nicky♥
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wow this was beautiful and your emotions run strong throughout it. Very well written.
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Wow!!
This is so beautiful it leaves me speechless. I really love the first line"must I bribe the night to steal the moon. This one draws you in and wraps around you like the velvet blanket of night.
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YEP edited this comment as well, haha! I understand things a bit better now for some reason and thru mine new eyes I see encouragement being offered to one who's in need. Tis a beautiful thing you have done for your friend....asking them to open their heart to accept your gift of friendship.
Wonderous dedication....
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Oh My God... i cant believe u did this... dedicating a poem to me? a stranger? m so touched by thy noble gesture
i read it here and i read it on hotmail and i ust say i was really touched... this is maybe the tousandsth time i read it and i just cant get enough...
thnk u a lot.... it seemed to me that u took ur time reading some of my stuff....
my heart is vandalized, yes....
and ur asking me the permission to heal it... this is too much for me... really i duno wat to say.
thnx isnt enough....
May I balm thy vandalized heart with heart of mine
and let them beat music of words, of similar rhymes
thnk u a lot
PEACE
*******JOWELL*****
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