look for the girl
with the sun in her eyes
look how happy
she percieves that smile to be
but she isn't real
[it takes time to find her]
but can you see
just how fake she's acting
she's putting her sunglasses
up over her eyes
so no one can see
the tears running her mascara black
her hair curls around her face
as she walks down the city streets
with the sun setting over the skyline
shooting colors off the tinted glasses
[her heart is perfectly staged]
they try breaking down her walls
though they aren't stable
he can't find the cracks[dents]
in the crumbling concrete
to tear apart every feeling
she's kept hidden so well
and now she writes so alone
[the crowd isn't relevant now]
she hides alone in her perfect darkness
she doesnt let anyone find her
she looks down to the ground
hiding her eyes
from his seeking glare
his fingers comb through her hair
asking her to look at him
but the hurt is to clear right now
[what if she loves him]
he's asking for her back
but she holds off for reasons
she'll never understand herself
it's this fear of tomorrow
that holds her heart
from reaching out to his again.
he's kissing her slowly[torturing]
as his hands slide over her hips
gripping at the spot
that will set her heart racing
[baby take me away]
she murmurs as she lifts
her eyes to his
at that moment her heart
opens to him
and that beautiful city girl
fell in love with that simple country boy
with a voice like standing water
and eyes like star lights
M. M. Hipp
1-24-08
7 01 p.m.
Author notes
A love poem [put who in your authors notes]
--it's for my army boy.
Nicholas K. Hipp.
I love him more than anything.
♥
hope this works for you darling.
♥©
Foreversofaraway.
A contest entry
- Broken Hearts Meanded By Love by Ignis Corpus.
500 points, ended February 8, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Will you be the one to catch her? by over the rainbow--x.
525 points, ended February 20, 2008, 82 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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'his fingers comb through her hair
asking her to look at him
but the hurt is to clear right now
[what if she loves him]'
Woweeeeeee [=
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thank you gorgeous.
happy judging.
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like glitter&&glue
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Oh this is beautiful. Simply beautiful.
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well thank you so very much.
♥
im happy you liked it.
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and that beautiful city girl
fell in love with that simple country boy
with a voice like standing water
and eyes like star lights
cuuuuuuuuuuuute!
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thank you soo soo much sweetie =]]
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this is fantasic! you have such beautiful imagery in this poem! i enjoyed reading it! i wish you the best of luck in the contest!
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well thank so much.
im happy you liked it.
thanks for the comment.
always
Forever.♥
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This is wonderful..you've created beautiful images of both emotions and imagery.
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thanks june.
im happy you liked it.
tell me how you're doing?
its been along time.
♥Forever
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'she hides alone in her perfect darkness
she doesnt let anyone find her
she looks down to the ground
hiding her eyes
from his seeking glare
his fingers comb through her hair
asking her to look at him
but the hurt is to clear right now
[what if she loves him]
he's asking for her back
but she holds off for reasons
she'll never understand herself
it's this fear of tomorrow
that holds her heart
from reaching out to his again.
he's kissing her slowly[torturing]
as his hands slide over her hips
gripping at the spot
that will set her heart racing
[baby take me away]'
I loved those lines!!!
i just love it!!!
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God bby.
thank you so much.
it took me forever to write it. im so happy it turned out so good.
he loved it too =]]
i love you.
[&hearts...Forever]
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Ohhhhhhhhh babbbby!!!!
I love this.
I lovelovelove it!
[millions]
[♥...Forever]
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thank you soo much babydoll.
i love you. yeah thats right. glue! lol.
[♥...Forever]
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