Calm, collected, and condemned.
Fear of instability lead bathetic disregard.
A smile that does not reach her eyes,
is all he receives for a love unrequited.
His plea for closure is not uttered.
She can not let go;
he does not want her to.
A reciprocated feeling lost on a whisper.
Her presence: a stone breaking windows in the heart behind his eyes.
The maddening of their voice in the others head,
an all too real reminder of what was never said.
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beautiful
pretty imagery, hits close to home and fantastic vocabulary.
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Captures the illusion of love, and the delusion of what love can become sometimes. As well as the twisted thoughts which roll around a mind that is tormented by denial, or ignorance. The second line fifth word is a typo, I think, should be "P" instead of a "b"??? Nice poem much more poetic than the others I read of yours.
Until closure,
Grimoire
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actually, it's not a typo; bathetic is a word.
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Oops. Sorry. I guess I should have looked it up but I didn't. 4give?
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it's fine.
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I love how it bounces back and forth between them,
And ends with all the things that never got to be heard. Moving.
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Powerful, in every word the flow and feelings done amazingly well, Each line strong flowing into the next one, Great work.
Romeo
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This is full of emotion. I liked the "A smile that does not reach her eyes,
is all he receives for a love unrequited." part, so suggestive. Write on
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For a young person, you have either loads of experience or unbounded determination with a zest for knowledge. This write is a piece that one would expect from a seasoned veteran of the world of Amour! I only hope this is not a product of experience of one so young, if it is, you have my respect for knowing and sharing!
Great Write!
Bjarne
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