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Cry ( A concrete poem)

    I really can't
help it but
I'm about
to cry
and show
the real me
  that is hiding
    from the world


Why am I so afraid
To be      who I truly
am to      you and the
world      why do
I keep hiding
From the world the me
who I        want to be
I  am          so afraid
of the            world and


Its cruel          words that
stab like        a dagger of
silver my        bane and I
fear what      you may say
  about me      why can't I
  just cry    and let go
    of all my pain that
      I carry inside
      of my heart
        my mind
        and  my
        soul  I
        am about
        to  cry

Author notes

A concrete poem is NOT easy, so cut me some slack in line lengths, it's almost impossible to keep the lengths exact.

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  • Miss-Uniqueness
    February 22

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    Omg this is so awesome bbe. I love the way you wrote it into the shape so it showed the word CRY! I have no fravorite Line in this i love it all it was all so deep and meaningful! x

  • Wanted By You
    January 25

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    I thought you did a good job. I'm not even sure what concrete poetry is, but I think I like it. I love how you made the lines fit to spell out CRY, but the poem itself it good. Just....awesome job!