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Falling Star

Sitting on the moonlit beach tonight,
in your lap, you hold me tight,
and you know there's nowhere I'd rather be
than having you here holding me.

Look, look, my love, a falling star,
someone else could have seen it from afar,
so quick, let us make a wish before
the chance is gone forever more.

You smile softly at my words,
kiss my neck, laugh kindly and purr,
'It's okay, my kitten, for it is true,
I need no more wishes, for I have you.'

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The best things in life are always unseen, thats why we close our eyes when we cry, kiss, and dream.

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  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    January 27, 2008
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    How sweet and so pretty! Loved the message in this...the last line...ahhh...perfect!

    Az


  • Angel Wing Disease
    January 26, 2008

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    This poem is so sweet. I love it!
    It just reminds me a wonderful love story.
    Like one of those romantic movies where they end up together and incredibly happy.

    Lovely write!
    Good luck in the contest.


    xx.


  • Rebel Meets Rebel
    January 26, 2008

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    Moving

    I don't know if you had anyone in mind when you wrote this but it holds a hell of alot of meaning for me. I'm shaking because of it Thank you for sharing it.


    "Wild Horses Couldn't Drag Me Away"


    • KytKitsune
      January 28, 2008
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      I happened to have the person I will not get to see for five years in my mind at the time I wrote this. He wrote me a poem about me sitting on the beach with him, and I incorporated the falling star into it myself.

      I'm glad this poem had some meaning for you :3