Reflective images illustrates my pain
Pain illustrated by my need
For answers
To this societal impression of acceptance
Praising that which is gluttonous
Yet portraying the image of feeble beauty
Mutilated emotions revealed exteriorly
Shuns this interior agony
Of worthlessness, ugliness, unaccepted
In the eyes of others
Whose eyes follow my trail of indignity
as whispered words scar more than any blade could inflict
these callous insensitive bacteria’s devouring
Esteems that were banished,
Cast from a spirit, that has faltered
Because of me?
Lack of self control, personal responsibility?
Your words, not reality
Was it I that cast myself into this collective structure of excess
A product injected into this vainglorious existence
called greed
With long term side effects on the prescription:
Shame
Suicide
Diabetes
Sexual deficiencies
Loneliness
Ridicule
No medicinal remedies
No prescribed antibiotics other than pain
That shifts the psyche into endorphin hysteria
Yet, survival remains my console
Hope embraces my future
For these matching scars remain
Juxtaposed in my eyes
While the continued search for my esteem
Will forever
continue
Author notes
Image Credit::
*water-fairy
When you know its wrong. Stp. If you don't, Learn. People have wants and desires and deserves to live a life of respect.
This is dedicated to a friend that changed her life regrdless of what her family, friends, husband who ever thought. She survived and made her life and health better. Love you Judy
In a list
A contest entry
- Emotion by Violent Glass.
300 points, ended January 27, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Faults by second-born.
450 points, ended February 6, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dear woman, kiss of cellulite. by Naridill.
800 points, ended February 3, 2008, 9 entries
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Comments
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I agree with you...there are so many 'scars' now in our society...and the pain is just getting more intense...thank you for sharing this personal write...and I'm glad that your friend survived...more power to you dear poet!
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Very beautiful dedication. An honest piece and phrased with emotional attachment and beauty.
Thanks for entering,
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thank U.
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this is really good
i hate the way people treat each other sometimes
i know the pain it causes, this was beautiful
i loved how in the end theres that hope
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thank U so much. It was hard to go through with my
friend but she got through it.
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Sad
This is a very sad, deep and emotional poem, you have penned it very well, it ia very sad that the world reticules those that may have a weight problem, trying to say all women should be the perfect size 6, when in reality not all women can be that size, alot of things come into factor, age, height, body type, I for one will never be that size 6 that world thinks is so beautiful. I bet that is not even average size, I bet that most women, if a survey was taken would be a probably a 14 or 16 on average. Learn to love yourself, as you are and people will see the amazing changes that can take place, you may even lose a few pounds, exercise and healthy diet, can mmake you feel better and helps you to lose weight. Starving yourself only makes your body store fat and gluttony, then purging ones self cause all types of health problems, I am glad that your friend found her own way. Excellent write, thank you for sharing and keep them coming.
raingoddess
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You always have a good view on so many things. I really appreciate that. It is sad that imagery dictates desire when actual the feeling is so much more. Thank u my friend
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Society presses the coldest blade against skin with ideals that everyone cannot fit within. We need to discover who we are and be satisfied with our shortcomings and flaws because we are all mere mortals, humans in a world of human beings. For those who point a finger...they need only look in the mirror of self to find that they too have faults.
Your poem is intelligently written, there is compassion and a feel of' "if they could just let go of what others think". I took myself though some horrendous times because I thought I was not worthy of the best. It took years, therapy, and a willingness to come from the depths of darkness and find the light.
I am happy that your friend pulled through. Many don't! There is help but sometimes those in dire straits cannot see beyond the scrim.
An excellent poem poet that strikes a chord on my heart strings. I wish you well in the challenge.
Much Love & Respect ♥
Renee
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Thank you so much for understanding. It wasn't even the challenge any more. Its to yell out "You are OK!!!" The hell with the unseeing eyes or rather yet, the seeing judging eyes. You are so right. There are people who are struggling and those that did not or do not have the resources or support to get help. So any step towards believing in ones self is a blessing. I thank you again an much love to you as well
- Michael
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Good luck in the competition. Very well penned indeed. I'm so glad to read that this was written for a friend who turned her life around. All the best to her. This is a stark reminder just how cruel society can be!
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Thank you. She is and I'm very glad.
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This was an excellent piece. I can relate with this & you know this. Keep it up
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Thank U - at least it gets people to think even if they don't relate.
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Wonderful job on this one. I fell into your 1st stanza. You shown some very valid points. Good luck.
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Thank U my friend - I always appreciate your time.
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whispered words scar more than any blade could inflict
Amen.
You are right.
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Thanks for your understanding
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OMG, I felt this piece 'n I felt it deeply...woooow hun, woooow. This poem was ladden with guilt and pain inflicted by society. As I read this piece, the tears almost began to fall for I felt as though someone was tearing my heart apart...this was a cry for help and understanding. I was so relieved when I read your author's notes and you said your friend was able to make it...she was able to triumph over it all...she was be a strong person, WOOOW!!!!
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Thank you - she is a strong woman. I don't see her as much but I'm proud of her and blessed that I was in her life as well as mine. I really appreciate your kind words.
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Deep
This poem truly carries a lot of depth in it. It is sad and yet hopeful. I really like that in a poem. I think you did a damn good job penning this poem. Kudos to you! And lets hope your friend appreciates it as well.
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I try to put out emotions that will mean something more than just rhyme. Thank U so much for your comments
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i really did like your writtin
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thank U
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Wow.
I have four younger sisters and nobody in my family is skinny after they hit 25 or so. You hit the issue on the head, well done. Nobody should have to work through the poisoned jungles of American society without a firm network of family and friends. No girl/woman/person should be left behind, forgotten or taken for granted. All people have worth!!!! Thanks for your vision, good luck in the contest.
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Thank you so much. its not a society that accepts this view of women. and its sick way of thinking. thank you for your input. I appreciate it. ~ michael
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It was POWERFUL and very well
written. It will be interesting to see how many can
understand it...or learn from it! How wicked it is
when you are the SCARS of yourself. Healing and wanting
to be whole looking for the Exit Door. Endorophin hysteria always stalknig and desperately seeking to
FINALLY FIND THAT EXIT DOOR,
and what is our responsibilities...do we feed the
SHAME AND SCARS GROWING THEM DEEPER AND LONGER...
or offer courageous voices of HOPE.
Your poem almost brought me to tears! Very well
written, powerful and with impact for those who
have the ears2hear and the hearts to give a damn!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : ))))) BRAVO! BRAVO! BRAVO! BRAVO!
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Thank you and thank you mostly because you felt that this wasn't just a poem but my emotional plea for understanding. I just happen to express it in a poetic forum. Blessings to you ~ Michael
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wow i don't even know what to say about this hun.
this is an amazing, thought provoking write!
you speak such words of depth and emotion, brilliant.
Thanks you so much for sharing, best of luck in the contest!
Tasha
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" whispered words scar more than any blade could cut" the poet gets to the nitty and gritty and pares down to the bone society butchers.
No medicinal remedies is correct, whatever the cause of carrying weight that society sees as unacceptable should not mean that they are not treated with respect and no, nothing comes in a bottle or pill as a cure for feeling this weight of judgement,whilst they fight to suppress appetite they have no appetite for life to suppress. Bravo!
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Beautiful comment my friend. I just know that it hurt to see friends on the brink of suicide because of intolerance. So Never stand by when injustice is ferried along. it had to be written. ~ Thank U
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My Dear Son
This is an very emotional read for it touches the lives of many women and some men. I myself have had my own problems and I had to deal with them. This is a very extra special observation on the pain, depression and survival of others. You done this with a brillant pen from the heart, showing you have learned from life's traps & pot holes that seem to pull some people down. Then never let them go. This is soulfully enlighting...........Love ya, Mom
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Thank U mom - its hard when you have family friends and people you care for go through this. It hurts more when you can remember with an immature mind I had these perverted thoughts. Maturity does help. Thanks for understanding. Your loving Son Michael
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Thank you Tasha - a good friend came to mind in a conversation and I had to spill this out. Thank you so much for appreciating the depth of this piece. ~ Mykeee
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True & Heartfelt
If only other people were able to be as open minded as you. I have experienced this too within society. I got so low that at one point life didn't seem worth it, not anymore though, I made some tough decisions and came through the other side. You are a very understanding person Swish, and have penned this brilliantly.
Good Luck with the contest.
Luv ~sweetness~
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Well I'm glad I still got you Sweetness and if I have to sing to you to let you know you're loved. Let me know. I want you around. I get selfish sometimes
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This my dear is the most True & Heartfelt
piece I've read in a very long time. So many messages are within this, I too have experienced such turmoil from society, glad there were people like you, who understood and was willing to be more open minded. You never know what a person is going through, and making them feel less, may just be the end of the ropes for him/her.
Great job, you've penned this in excellence.
Good luck
CoCo♥
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Thank U - i wasn't the kindest person when I was younger but that came from my own pain so I learned. and became an advocate. Thanks for understanding
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