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Silent Escape

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I let you in believing you wanted to touch my soul
To sicken me, capture me, and torture me- was your only goal.

You feed me lies as your breath caresses my skin
Stole my heart, my life and soul and you want it again.

“I’ll give it up, I’ll block it out”, I constantly say
Only to end up as a playing piece in your mental games.

This addiction keeps repeating like a one line song
I’ve been tangled in your spider web for to damn long

I wish this situation would simply go away
Just when I think it’s safe to trust- you go astray

Before I used to think you had such a gentle kiss
Now all I see are filthy lies dripping from your lips

It’s sad that every night I’m crawling in my dreams
Hoping to escape your life without being seen

It seems to me the only time you seem to care
Is when there is a possibility that I won’t be there

You know how I feel, but you choose to ignore
In doing so it encourages me to walk away some more

I listen so intensely and I hear her voice
Or is it just an illusion and chaotic noise

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  • tortured-heart
    May 15, 2008

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    amazing write...i definatly know the feeling and this write portrays it in such a true and profound way...keep em comin!
    peace, love, & cheese


  • Beware The Shadows
    April 23, 2008

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    OMG I loved it
    You can really paint a picture in your head with this
    Keep writing...your great =]
    added to favourites
    xx


  • Lislaine
    March 16, 2008

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    amazing

    OMg really amazing! this is a piece of art i really like it...rhyme was brilliant... really liked it!!!!


  • SongOfSilence
    February 8, 2008

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    awesome..

    you paint such a vivid picture with your words.. and that picture scares the hell outa me!

    but thats good.

    brilliant write.. keep it up, luv.


  • Naridill
    February 3, 2008

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    Seems stunning. Some word choice takes a lot of the imagery away and leaves it a little lifeless but definitely a beautiful and lamenting piece.

    Thanks for entering,


  • disenchanted-vampire
    January 28, 2008

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    This is a really good write. The lines
    'Before I used to think you had such a gentle kiss
    Now all I see are filthy lies dripping from your lips' really stand out; there's such powerful imagery. Well done.

  • enchanterxhater
    January 25, 2008
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    It is very deep.

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