Holding hands I start again
though my heart lies within
someone else.
I hold nothing but tainted love
He holds me,
Still I feel the hallowed hole
where my heart used to lie.
Tainted love
shines through
my hallowed blackened eyes.
I feel nothing,
I long to be able to love again.
Though my heart
lies within someone
I now call a friend
I find myself in sin again
For within I lust to love again
My love has been taint
by the darkest blackened poisons of this realm.
Pain,
Hate,
deciet,
and lies.
Memories brint yet more
tears to my hollowed somber ambered eyes.
I'm sorry love for you can't see
the tainted love
that dwells within me.
It boils black within my veins.
Driving me insane.
I feel as if everything
I've worked for.
I'm sorry love for you can't see the
tainted love that dwells in me.
Author notes
My love has been tainted
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Quick question, is lust your sin? I read the word lust in there. Great poem by the way, I just wanted to be sure of your choice because it seems like it could be a couple of sins. A very dark, descriptive piece, wonderful!
Thank you for the entry!
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I'm sorry I couldn't get back to you quicker. yes my sin was lust, though you were right it is a combination of several sins. Thank you very much for your time and consideration.
~Stormy-ann~
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dam...i definately understand this one...ive been living tainted love since my fiance died...
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this is pure gold awesome u have such talent
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love it.... very good write!!!
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This is a great writeing i love it chicka
luv ash
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WOW I Love It
This is a great write... i especially love " I find myself in sin again
For within I lust to love again" amazing wording
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Awww, hunny...
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Such emotion and pain are felt in your words. I'm so sorry you're in the place that you are...
I do believe, though, that one day you'll find love again...Although, it may take awhile.
God bless you sweetie.
Also, on more of a critiquing side, I think the use of punctuation such as commas would work well in your poem. Although, it is not necessary, it would help with the flow. Just my thoughts. Great job, though. Wonderfully sad, emotion evoking piece.
~Butterfly
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