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.:Forever and Forever:.

I was laying in my bed
  so silently questioning
my heart with
^
^
^
^
my head
waiting as the minuets passed,
  you were on the [[phone]]
said to wait one minuet,

so I waited all

      alone

quietly I cried,
thinking you forgot
p
i
  c
  k
    i
    n
      g off the petals
whispering you love me not  
trying to let a breath escape
  trying to heal my heart with tape..
then you said a word,
  and another that I heard
I wanted to tell you so much
wanted to tell you I love you so much,
need you to know
I love you this much.
Cutie pie, for you I'd die
No matter what you do,
I'll take care of you
I'll kiss you
and hug you
Darling dearest,

I will marry you

I'll hold you close,
keep you warm
keep you safe
In every storm
I'll love you till forever


forever and forever

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Not finished yet...but i like it

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Comments


  • Perception
    March 6, 2008
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    Wonderful.... I don't know what you could add...


  • wanderingstarlet
    March 6, 2008

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    I think this is a really good poem. I think it's good just as it is, even if you say it's unfinished. Sometimes the best poetry, is the poetry unfinished, left for others to wonder "where'd it go". Anywayz, I believe you should keep writing, because you can possess some GREAT talent.

    ~Sammerz~


  • Alien She
    January 26, 2008
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    i love it!