she is a suffragette
without much movement
worth note or vote
by those
who only seek
nip and tuck fucks
the cause
without a rebel
inside of her
reminding her
she isn't anyone's fantasy
dressing to disguise
what Reubens found Rebeunesque
within feminine folds
of plumped
pink
flesh
dying a slow death
inside the body
boxing her need
to genuflect
in deference
to the stigmata
of society
she walks
with self-inflicted wounds
that
brought momentary bliss
of one pain
extinquishing another...
Author notes
NB Anonymous contest entry. To view the picture inspiration and topic for this write please click to the contest.
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wow a very strong write here! thanks for entering and good luck! =]
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ah yes, self inflicted madness, one pain is just swapped over and flciked into the heart with society's ease
a good poem.
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Researchers found that babies, aged 6 to 8 months, looked longer at attractive faces than at unattractive ones. There seems to be an innate concept of beauty. But culture, also, has a strong influence. This is a poem that tells a lot about people, society and culture. Well done Yvette. I enjoy your poems.
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Wonderful response to the prompt, compassionate and wise. Your elegant words convey without pity or bathos the alienation of those who do not conform to what society sees as the norm, whether in figure, race, gender or ability. Although you wrote of women, this poem has a more universal application. Well done.
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Wow this is intense,captured me from the first words "she is a suffragette
without much movement"... Wonderful precise writing, precise yet profound and elegant,and such a painful finish.My pleasure to have read it. All the best again, Lisa
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Well penned poem here
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I don't know what to say, that hasn't been said. This is brutal honesty. It's fluent and lamenting.
Thanks for entering,
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an amazingly eloquent and powerful take on the prompt - quite a poignant interpretation!
stark imagery combined with effective language - beautiful in a perverse and disturbing haunting kind of way (which, in this case, given this topic, is a good thing, sorry if my wording is off-putting)- well written - it provokes thought & definitely strikes a nerve...
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as always you bring your unique style to another venue of thought, and that is a quality to be envied, to encompass so much with your work and still retain a voice all your own, is simply staggering. I believe it is sad, that aesthetics are such an important part of this world, how warped true beauty can be by the very nature of humanity, however would a sunset be as beautiful as we see it where there a stellar scar, jagged and pale across the sky?? How universal is beauty anyway, so much to think on my dear and so little time in this world to do it
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Absolutely incredible.
You're like an ice skater with such consitently incredible tricks like this one you had up your sleeve. I had highlighted the first lines, then the first stanza, then the second, before realizing I should enjoy the poem and continuing loving it how I was. You word play is awesome and the flow was soul stealing.
I'll go read it again, good luck in the contest, yet another winner.
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Brilliant. Quite brilliant. J
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Excellent
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Ah, so true.
Love this:
she walks
with self-inflicted wounds
that
brought momentary bliss
of one pain
extinquishing another...
Nice job here. This is so true!! But you don't think about the other pain while your shoving McDonald's french fries into your pie hole!!
Great poem!
Monique
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DANG!!! this was amazing. I liked it a first but after I saw the picture. It became almost heart stopping. You captured so much of the picture and The woman I know that it becomes a charge to fight for. Just amazing and your style for this was done so well as well. Thanks for a great piece. I may have to join this contest
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Not much I can say about this except it is brilliant ... those closing lines are killers.
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