{ i’ve learnt
to breathe deep
forgive
and forget }
i know
there is a supernova
exploding
under my skin
but this time
i’m going to leave
it there to throb
it’s own ecstatic
codes.
i hope you know
i’m wrapped in whisper
where there is no threat
of silver serrated
cutlery.
i hope you know i haven’t
been swallowed by a
deafeningly silent gravity force;
i payed the price for lucid wings
and i’m flying free
towards a different shade of sky.
{ i’ve learnt
to breathe deep
forgive
and forget }
critique please.
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This is really beautiful.
I like all the tingling feelings you have in there, like little fireworks and explosions and shimmery wings & tiny knives. It just gives this whole poem like a little space-dust.
I love the opening and closing forgive & forget thing, its so pretty & I just generally like the mood & the message. You are just going to let your emotions implode inside this time, you can contain yourself and get somewhere better than just getting angry or something like that, you're just dreaming on moving on. Thats cool.
xo♥
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Fantastic piece, your imagery was both abstract in beautiful ... really felt the ending. keep up the good work!
Ryan
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thank you thank you thank you
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hannnah, this is beautiful... where have you been? school? that sucks. i hope everything's going well.
♥ esha.
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thank you, m'dear.
nah i'm actually on holidays at the moment.. school goes back next week. just haven't been finding the right words, you know.. bet everything's pretty awesome these days.
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