i cannot draw the human figure, without pants.
they provide the essential angles and straight lines
from which i can construct
the rest of a body (in my drawings
everyone wears extremely straight blue jeans, and a belt,
and shoes that look like potatoes, and some
kind of starchy polo shirt)
i can't dream without waking up filled
with the fear there is a warrant out with my name on it.
i came to one time last year, and would not leave my sun-filled room
because i was paralyzed with the thought that
the station wagon was a pretzel
around a light post downtown.
i crept though the front door,
squeezed my eyes at the sun
beaming off the hood of my dark blue saturn,
spun around to see my mother's surprised face.
i was only wearing boxer shorts, it was
two in the afternoon.
i can't be complimented, and there is really
not a whole lot i can say about that. i can't smile
in pictures and feel okay with myself. i will never
want to be as skinny as the doctor does,
though i spend entire days telling myself that it is
exactly what i want.
i can't understand what the fuck goes on in my head
half the time, and i just need to call you
and say "hi, i'm your brother,
i love you".
because i do.
i really just love you guys.
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my attempt at writing "something shitty"
In a list
So.. whats you think about it?
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this is really great...
My favourite bits
i cannot draw the human figure, without pants.
(in my drawings
everyone wears extremely straight blue jeans, and a belt,(i laughed out loud at this bit)
and shoes that look like potatoes, and some
kind of starchy polo shirt)
i can't dream without waking up filled
with the fear there is a warrant out with my name on it.
i was paralyzed with the thought that
the station wagon was a pretzel
around a light post downtown.
squeezed my eyes at the sun
beaming off the hood of my dark blue saturn,
i can't be complimented, and there is really
not a whole lot i can say about that. i can't smile
in pictures and feel okay with myself. i will never
want to be as skinny as the doctor does,
though i spend entire days telling myself that it is
exactly what i want.
right back at ya baby
and thats something shitty?
you bastard
dont you ever have a bad day and write something terrible?
Im appalled
5 stars
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good days tend to leave me speachless.
i have been having a completely shit time the last couple of weeks = goddamn goldmine
i go on amazing vacation to yellowstone, see beautiful flora and fauna = nothing to say
but thank you for all the praise and everything else.
i am glad someone is reading this stuff
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-spun around to see my mothers surprised face.
apostrophe.
this is not shitty. shut up.
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I don't think this was shitty at all. I thought this was a beautiful write. Fantastic imagery in this and the flow was great, too. The descriptions you put in the piece helps to create an image in the reader's mind. Have you thought of being an author or writing a book because you're really good.
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haha you silly boy. don't you see?
what you do, it's beautiful. even when you attempt to attempt to write "something shitty".
first stanza i am opposite. i can't draw clothes. only people naked.
second, wonderous, the preztel image was great, the ending was funny in a surprise way.
the last i understand because you are human. and also
you are.
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are you mocking the repetition?
poop.
hey! but you liked it. i tried to make it mediocre. i aimed too low. -
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i never mock.
you can't be mediocre.
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