Force me down
And press yourself against me.
Tease me with carnal thoughts
Of what I know is to come
What I even desire to come.
Your tongue flicks against my ear
And I hear you whisper
Whisper my own thoughts
"Admit it," you say. "Admit your lusts."
Then, my admittance issues in breathy tones.
My body is slammed against the headboard
Causing new bruises to blossom
Yet I sit completely still
While all reasonable thoughts become lost.
I have become a series of aches
Both sexual and physical.
I barely comprehend my suroundings
When you yank me foward with lengthy locks.
A kiss is forced,
Brusing and relentless
But moments later a metallic taste dances upon my tongue
Dancing in a bright crimson light.
A small cry from me
And a sly smile from you
Sadistic in every way.
You know you hold the power.
The rough foreplay continues
And soon I can only repeat one thing.
Pleas and beggings for you to stop
To stop your teasing and ravage me.
So corrupt me even more, Father
Chain me with your arousing ways
For you won't keep me forever
No matter how intoxicating you may be
Because one day an angel will set me free.
In a list
A contest entry
- Love in the Shadows by E-jak.
530 points, ended February 14, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Addictions by LOVELYmurder.
600 points, ended March 24, 43 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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*blinks* I honestly..Don't know what to say..That was grand.
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metallic taste dances upon my tongue- What was that suppose to be? And if it werent for the father parent i would also have said. SEXY !"!"! but thats just weird. Still heres 3 applauds because othere then that it was super hot.
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The metallic tastes refers to blood, and the Father part isn't supposed to be sexy. It's supposed to be an addiction. It's a vile thing yet it arouses him, whether he likes it or not. He can't get enough.
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I don't really see how this is related to addictions. It's a good piece with great imagery and descriptions but it doesn't fit with the contest.
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The person is addicted to the sex. It's not really shown as an addiction until the last stanza, and even then it's not in your face.
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moans softly
not knowing what to say after reading both parts and yet feeling the hunger within herself just as much...you pen a erotic tale very well.
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I like this... I read the second piece to this before hand... and it was more bdsm it seemed.
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Oh my. This was quite interesting. I'm not one for these kind of poems but the imagery you portrayed was amazing. The word choice was great. This really painted a mental picture, horrible though it may be, in my mind. Great job on this.
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terrible
scary thing to happen *hugs* your dad is being the monster here poor you *hugs again* you write really well made me shiver a bit urghhh i hope this isn't true and if it is darn i wish it didn't happen to you..God bless you lol..may you be healed of your wounds and if it didn't happened...this poem for those boys who were molested by their fathers ...man i don't know what to say but urghhhh!
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O.O *whimpers in appreciation* I cannot say more...damn.
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thats good
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I sometimes surf the BDSM related poems and came across this ... please note that this is NOT BDSM - BDSM is Safe, Sane and Consensual
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In tis era, that would be true, I guess. Forgive me if I had offended; I did not mean such intent. Sometimes, my mind simply does not view things like the modern man, even those you are "different."
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I like the idea of your body being slammed against the headboard. Did it make a big bang? Did the neighbours complain? Not a very funny poem apart from that.
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good show!
A masculine attempt to keep it that way, well done!
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tastiness
'nuff said
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sexy sexy,
except for the "Father" part.
twisted and lovely.
i found a typo, though; "yur".
and is "comprende" supposed to be spanish, or is it supposed to be "comprehend"?
i especially liked the stanza about the kiss. mm. :]
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Yeah, I found the typo as well, but I was like dammit to all hell, I'm going to bed so yeah. As for the comprende, I guess you're right. I had comprehend before, and it didn't look right so I thought it was wrong. Also, the "Father" part is not supposed to be sexy. It's an addiction. Honestly, I debated putting the Father in there, but it made it more so, because the subject does want out, but the body does not always listen to the mind. Anyway, thanks for the comment.
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