Repenting rubies
gather
into rooms
where broken help the broken
pick up pieces
fallen
by dusty roadsides
(left for dead)
Stoic sobriety sits
at tables marked
by coffee rings
from bottomless paper cups;
offering a caffeine fix laced with hope
We’re on our knees
begging
for serenity
as our story is told
offering strength to another
(simplicity is in the plan)
Scales are removed
from fallen eyes
as splintered remains
are polished and refined
previously shredded
by unrelenting consumption
that offered no condolences
Drawn together by hell-bent addiction
we huddle, cleaving to this new adhesive
that binds and bonds
broken spirits
with forming clarity
(accepting what we cannot change)
A contest entry
- Recovering Alcoholics Need Poetry Too ... Support Needed by Asylaarix.
725 points, ended May 8, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I love feedback, good or bad. I just want to get better so give me honest opinions
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LOVE IT
thank you for letting me put it in our newsletter....
one question, do you mind if i change the word "sobriety" to the "recovery"??
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oh yes
how well i have walked the walked
and have been healed
this is a great poem
youi wrotee it just like it realy is
bless you my friend
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You are an AWESOME poet. I love the "rubies" reference. That was a fascinating, and at the same time genius choice. I like the alliteration I saw in a few places. I love the last stanza. I love the way you closed this one. I have nothing but respect for your abilities. This was one of your best.
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Like it.
Well written...hell bent is right.
Cheers.
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this is a great poem.
with a deep powerful meaning in the lines.
"(accepting what we cannot change)"
^^powerful
i love this.
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very deep, with such strong emotion, for the one's of of who really get the full meaning. great write!
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Often we need a reminder or helping hand in life to help heal our spirits...such a beautiful write, saying so much in lovely metaphor and imagery...Nicely done.
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Thanks! It was written for the 'rooms' that changed my life...
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Acceptance
To be allowed to be ho we are and not to become sorted out by others. Hope, faith and love. I believe that only then can we really be not broken
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