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Friends of Fortune

Emerald blades that cut the silence
stirring with the air
mixing the spring of morning
until breathing is all you can do

To embrace the scent after a delicate rain
threatens

a burning
rainbow below your feet
leaves
dancing through the pain

When you come to the end of the path
where there is no trap left to stir
Fate falls in your hands,
Nature, it was always
Her.

Author notes

hm..hard to explain. lolz. I'm too tired....haha.

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  • ShelleyA
    February 8, 2008

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    A good write. Serene. Lovely depth of feeling. Good imagery, flow and tone. Nice descriptives. Good word choice. Thank you for your entry.


  • autumns rising
    January 25, 2008

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    arrrrrrrrwwwwwwwwwww how wonderful. i read it like four times and it got better and better. Good luck in the contest!


  • AmazinJason
    January 25, 2008

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    I like it

    I love the way this ends, made me want to take a deeper look at the rest of the poem. The emerald blades and burning rainbow are pretty.
    Wow I understood the poem a lot better
    reading it the third times the charm I guess.