The silence is deafening
Blank screen before me
I’ve begged it to speak
But the words don’t come
Punishing me
For stepping over that line
Punishing me
for caring too much
This heart feels empty
My words seem empty
The screen is empty
Oh how I miss you…
In a list
A contest entry
- Anything You Want :: Celebrating my 100 Trophies by Manda Kathryn.
900 points, ended February 13, 2008, 45 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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The title is effective both as an introduction and part and parcel of the poem. I see you used blue font to compound the blue feelings portrayed. Indeed silence can say much more than any amount of words. The poetess conveys well the emotional vacuum of feeling empty. Congratulations on the Honourable Mention. Well done.
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G'Day All-About-Annie
Wow. Strongly heart-touching, this really hit me hard as I have felt these emotions.
I love how you penned it.
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Thank you for your entry
Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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You have penned a beautiful pooem. I know the feeling your words say. Many times I sit here and miss a dear friend because they are not here. Great Write. Take care, Sandy
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Simply beautiful... simple in it's yearning message... beautiful in it's form and the imagery evoked. well done!
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oh Annie this is just wonderful! what descripition you have showed here and I could picture you sitting there with that empty sad gaze. very good girl!!
Mary
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Good title. Good use of the metaphor.
Metaphor are used here:
This heart feels empty
My words seem empty
The screen is empty
Oh how I miss you…
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