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Boogie Streets

You are my exulted and dark despair
My crown of light and sinful pride
You kissed me when I was filled with pain
I am convicted, jailed and tried

A sip of absinthe with a cigarette
Then soon I must depart
I left your bed still unmade
And gathered up my bled out heart
The city was a melting pot
The street whores like wilted angels
I stood my ground against the tide
And copied all their labels

Yet still my love you fill my space
With all the pleasures that we shared
In rivers filled with open wounds
No avenue or expense was spared
I worshipped every part of you
I knelt in benediction by your feet
You motioned by pulling at my hair
And bade me there to eat

O my exulted and dark despair

So let us just rejoice our sins
And tread so lightly here
As saint and sinner do entwine
To cast out their demon fears
And we can map out our bodies there
By tracing every vein
And using rusty needle points
To explore them all again

You are my exulted and dark despair
My crown of light and sinful peak
You kissed me when I was filled with pain
Upon these Boogie streets

A sip of absinthe with a cigarette
Then soon I must depart...

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AP name dstreetpoet
words of obsession & addiction

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  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 25

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    thank you for this entry into my contest. i wish you well in the judging process. this is a very vivid write. viyanna rosemarie


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    March 24

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    Very Vivid Imagery!
    Well written with good flow of the rhyming verse!
    Well Done and Best of Luck in the contest!


  • Serenity-words
    February 16
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    Wow

    Great write, thanks so much for putting this into my contest! Great job!


  • Never Fall in Love
    November 3, 2008

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    I love the first 2 stanzas and bits of the third .. I think it just started to lose some appeal after that, hardly kept my attention.

    But for the parts I did like, kudos, I rarely ever see rhyme done well.


  • chilali
    October 28, 2008

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    A really good poem that I have to say, I enjoyed reading! Thank you for sharing this with me and entering my contest. Please mention "the itsy bitsy spider climbed up the water spout" in your AN. If you read the contest page, you'll know why Thank you once again and good luck!


  • Butterfly.Wingz
    September 11, 2008

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    wpw this is amazing!!!! I loved the words you chose so whimsical! and addiction is a hard thing to overcome I've been there keep fighting!!!!
    xoxox
    Tasha


  • Toxic Beauty
    September 11, 2008

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    This is a really great poem...kept me wanting more...good luck in the contest!

    Toxic Beauty


  • ForeverFarAway
    February 22, 2008

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    I really liked this
    The way you described everything is really cool
    Well done
    Goodluck in my contest!
    xxx
    Eli


  • love my jose luis
    February 11, 2008

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    I reallyl ike the imagery, I think that you did a great job on this entry thank you for that and good luck in my contest.
    ~Maria


  • azlyn gold member
    January 24, 2008

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    Filled with imagery...deeply emotional and honest! Thanks for the entry and best of luck!!!

    Az

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